Reviews for Something's Wrong With You, Really |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You need to watch your punctuation (superfluous commas and missing ones, and one spot needed a spacce), and this could have gone through some editing, just to clean it up. i.e. "You would think that someone that just suffered" should be "who just suffered" and "You. pathetic, Red" should have pathetic capitalized, and there were some other things. But it was cute, and well, not all hospital stories end tragically, so kudos to you for not following the trend. I'm glad xoxluurve added this to our c2. (: |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw. ait does he die ? i hope not |
![]() ![]() That. Was. So. AWESOME! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, that was unique. I loved it. I've never read something like that. It was short, but gave all the background information and everything needed. I really liked the way you wrote it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was really sweet. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is definitely one of the best one shots I ever read. It's amazing and I really cried a lot here. I feel like squealing and giggling and everything else. I also love the characters, they feel like well-rounded persons. Awesome, considering the length of this. Overall, one of the best. I loved it. I just feel that this would be one heck of a novel if you must write a whole story. I'd love to read that. Looking forward to your other works! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome. I first thought that he really died. Great story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() "so just fucking plug it up" ever so charming isn't he? Love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am super glad you didnt have them die! I would have cried! Seriously! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed every single bit of this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh wow, oh wow wow wow. I just loved this, so much. Seriously, it was amazing. I can kind of relate. I just, very good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() F*. EVIL! So so evil. I think i read it almost the entire time with my pulse going twice as fast cause i didn't know when he'd just pop off! You should put in the genre as Romance/Humour. Really. Cause at the end of everything you just feel like laughing a lot. (Mostly out of relief that Brandon didn't die). Sukanya |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOVE-LOVE-LOVE-LOVE-LOVED IT! |
![]() ![]() ![]() ahahaha that's so sweet and funny and sad all at the same time! love it |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's lovely. :D I'm all for tragedy since it brings out raw emotions in people, in my opinion anyway. But I'm not really fully into it. But anyway, I love how this really showed the dynamic of love/hate. It SHOWED, not TELL. How she felt really manifested in the lines. It's not wordy, lengthy and it doesn't need to be. I just really LOVE it. |