Reviews for I Wish
DrinkItUpAlice chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
bitter poem it is... but so good!
Whispers of the Lost chapter 1 . 6/15/2009
I LOVED this. I especially loved the parentheses in every stanza. It really added alot to the rhythm and the tone. Great emotions, beautiful imagery. I loved the red bull and christmas tree analogies. Great work!

The Beautiful Letdown chapter 1 . 5/22/2009
I think he knows how much you like hom, he just can't believe it... I hope things get better.:)
BedHead-RedHead chapter 1 . 5/21/2009

'the rush of adrenaline through my veins' was great, followed by a superb 'like a thousand red bulls when you hold my hand'. That was just awsum! (that line made my day!) :)

'The words on the tip of my tongue (i know they'd make you fall in love with me)' Love that line, it uniquely captures the attention. 'that die on my lips when you say "hello". ' Way to end it! yup, it was really well done!
HighOnBrokenWings chapter 1 . 5/20/2009
Bitter, yes. But also very well written and relatable :D

"I wish you could smell

The bitter fragrance

Of unrequited love"

Those were very cool lines :)
listen to what i've never said chapter 1 . 5/20/2009
Holy Macaroni I love this! It's beautiful and deep and I just love it :) Great job