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I think I'm in love...

With... well... Joseph and Brian, that is.

They're so, haha, fucked up it's funny! This is what I like, because I have a soft spot for little fucked up fucks. You did it all perfectly. At first, well, in the first couple of chapters, their personalities were so -solid- that it was hard to feel anything. But this? This? This just took the effing cake.

I have no idea how to explain it. But you did... really well. Awesomely well. So well... that... well... I hate the favorite stories list, because people just pile everything they've ever read on it. But you, this story, yeah.

I'm going to favorite it.

Haha, this one made me laugh. Joseph is very -dry-, and I guess that's what makes him a pleasant guy to read first-person in.

You know what? In the other chapters, in which you'd mention Eric, I didn't have that much interest in him. I assumed that maybe he was more for character depth than actual development. But now, I'm thinking he might have a larger role. Or something.

I still think Brian is an ass (even though he apologized) and I still think Joseph is off. Eh, maybe it's because I'm pretend to be an atheist half the time, but they don't... like, at all... seem religious. Maybe that's the point?

That was very... interesting? I dunno. The Joseph seems a bit off and... well... Brian seems like an ass.

God, great two chapters. I love Brain's last line. Some pastor he'll make if he keeps fucking girls and kissing boys. Loved all of Joseph's memories bout Eric. Poor guy, probably wasn't Joseph's perfect match...oh, and the kiss! Oh god, I can't wait 'til the next one!

I love Joseph's theory about Jesus and Judas. It actually makes a lot of sense, if I was a Christian I'd begin to suspect :P

I'm starting to sense some sexual tension between Brian and Joseph, which is always a good thing. Brian seemed a little bit distracted when Rice was fucking him. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

I love your idea of putting the characters in a different setting. It still works very well.

Brian has got to be my favourite, there's something very real and very sexy about him. His lax attitude to his Christianity is quite funny. Great start.

i like it!

I liked itt.

c: I love how Brian was acting the whole time. Like.. you didn't really know what he was thinking because he would just look at Joseph. and I could imagine his dark eyes.

Update soon. (:

Interesting story!

And here I was, thinking that there weren't any good stories left on fictionpress, and then I see yours.

I enjoyed this. Normally I don't like the whole gay guy knows he's gay and even has sex in front of people with another guy, but.. this was actually really believable.

Lulz.

I rather liked this chapter, I like how you get to know Joseph better. I also liked how he kept thinking about Eric when he was with Rice, it seemed a bit sad, and also adds more conflict because as he said they're not talking. My absolute favourite line was “You kissed me last night. Even Jesus would’ve fucked you up for that.” It was funny, but you still get the sense that Brian's dead serious about it.

Looking forward to an update :)

I loved the way that this opened. Not only because I didn't know that story in the Bible, but also because it's a good recurring theme in this chapter, and it just works well. I also really like Brian, he seems to be a good combination of straight edge and hardass. Overall a good start and I'm excited to read more.