|Reviews for Burning Brightly|
| bubublacz chapter 31 . 1/30
Wooohhh! I enjoyed this :) Anti-climactic ending but nonetheless this was fun :D
| bubublacz chapter 25 . 1/30
Oh no! Fuck Kalias! Uggghh!
| bubublacz chapter 16 . 1/30
Good that they're friends again :) I mean with her twin :D
| bubublacz chapter 11 . 1/30
gaaahhh! what is wrong with kailas? i hope she gets with daymon just to spite him! gahhhh!
| bubublacz chapter 9 . 1/30
Hahaha lol! i felt like rai when kalias told her about the horse :D
| bubublacz chapter 6 . 1/30
| bubublacz chapter 4 . 1/30
No wayyy! I tell you dear I'm really liking this story more and more each chapter! :D *girlish shriek* *grinning so wide that my lips seem to fall off* hahaha
| bubublacz chapter 1 . 1/30
| genuisgina chapter 30 . 1/6
Thank God. She finally sees d light.
| genuisgina chapter 24 . 1/6
Rainier is being stupid. Her reason for nt telling kalias is baseless. I'm upset wit her.
| genuisgina chapter 19 . 1/5
I'm glad she's bcoming a stronger person.
| genuisgina chapter 1 . 1/5
Rainier seems too meek for my liking i hope she grows more backbone as d story progresses.
| calli chapter 17 . 12/7/2013
You know, rereading that chapter always puts a smile on my face. Its just too funny.
| A. Daicab chapter 30 . 12/4/2013
I must say ive read many fictionpress stories and yours is in my top 3, also i read at least 4 romance books a week (not kidding, sort of ocd with reading) :-) and BB is the first story not published to make it into my favorites list! I LOVED IT! you absolutely completed your final objectives. It needs editing but the effect was amazing. I loved how you moved from thenormal stuff in the supernatural circle. I fell for your characters and your plot. Congrats! IM REALLY GLAD I CAME ACROSS IT!
| Guest chapter 31 . 12/3/2013
Well, I had many thoughts while reading this.
First I recognize that this is a rather old story, so I'm sure you don't really care and I'm sorry in advance for the length. I'm just rambling about some things I noticed while reading.
Let's talk about Rainer... She was annoying. So incredibly annoying. Characters are supposed to be flawed, without flaws they would be boring, but she just bothered me. As someone who is so insanely insecure you would think I would've been able to relate to her, but I just couldn't. The way she came off was just too annoying, and she had a habit of leaping to conclusions about people for no reason (see Daymon). But she wasn't necessarily a bad character. I just wish there had been more character development because I feel like the Rainer from Chapter 1 and the Rainer from Chapter 30 were pretty much the same.
As for the plot, well... It was... hmm. I sort of get the feeling you do what I do sometimes and you didn't actually plot it out. You just had an idea of what you wanted to happen and wrote, which is a fine way to write, but it requires a lot of heavy editing and I don't think this novel got that editing.
I wish there had been a bit more character development for everyone honestly, and maybe character for some. Like Layton. He was the villain yes, but he had no real character. All we knew was that Rainer felt like he was a creep... and then suddenly in his last moments he turns into an abusive creep? And Bella and Daymon just sort of fall off the face of the Earth a lot, only appearing when they're needed. I wanted to know more about Bella. Why were her parents so awful? How did she meet Kailas? I feel like this story could've been so much better had the characters been fleshed out a bit more.
And finally the writing itself. It wasn't bad, but it didn't start out very good. First person is a hard thing to write, and maybe if it hadn't been first person I wouldn't have been so annoyed by Rainer... There were a few spots where you seemed to switch between present and past tense but I noticed it less as the story progressed. It also began to flow much better and I was glad to see the improvement. It was good enough that It kept me reading for 30 chapters even though the main character wanted to make me scream, and that's a pretty good acomplishment.
I'm curious as to how your writing has improved in the year since this story was completed and I think I'll be checking out the sequel.
In a final note I just want to congratulate you on completing a 100k word novel. That's longer than most published books.