Reviews for Hearing the Truth Part 2 |
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![]() ![]() Where is the rest? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't mean to fluff my feathers, but sometimes I find myself forgiving people far quicker than others would have and grudges are hardly existant to me. Or at least, that's what I've been told before. "I would've punched his face in, Lizzie. I'm not sure how you do it." But ever since I was smaller, I've absolutely detested any signs of infidelity. I'm not sure why, (I mean other than the obvious) because I've never actually seen anyone close to be be cheated on or even cheat for that matter. Yet I still find this grip around my chest when I think about it. I'm not so sure when I'd forgive them if I went through this. Certainly not right then. Maybe never. I've realized to myself that I would probably give no mercy, whatsoever, and I find it difficult to be proud OR disappointed in myself. Or even accept it. I suppose all I can do is pray. Pray that this situation will never present itself to me. I loved her reaction. Please, do keep writing. c: |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah this is really good. I don't usually read oneshots but maybe I have a penchant for pain because the descriptions really intrigued me. Very intense, you definitely bring out the emotions in both those parts, though it was interesting how you wrote them in two very different styles. I can't tell which is better, but both were effective. You possibly could have capitalized more on her feelings in this one though, delved more into it. It was good but I feel like it may have gone by too quickly too, so perhaps a bit more. Otherwise, great job. - Alyssa |
![]() ![]() ![]() Intense! Very well written - I have to say I prefer this second part over the first. But hey, I think I'm biased! I just bring myself to feel sorry for the guy; I just can't. I can really feel her emotions, how her whole demeanour changes. I like the fact there are no names, no physical descriptions. Making it anonymous really allows the reader to feel as though it is them. Anyway, I'm sure you're bored of my rant. But I just want to say I liked it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw, these were beautiful Ri |
![]() ![]() ![]() Part one was good, if a little slow. This, on the other hand, was very well done. I can't imagine where you got this inspiration for this, but it worked out. In fact, I'm intrigued. What happens next? I like that you stopped it where you did, though. In this case, I just don't think it would have been right to give the story a definite ending. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like how you wrote this and "Telling the Truth Part 1" too. Your writing projects authentic feelings. It seems real. You should continue this line of stories with these characters to show what happens next. Good luck! |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh please continue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow... i have read all your short storys.. i LOVE THEM! Your are suck an amazing writer..."You owe my $40, those were my favorite jeans.":) loved that! you are ah-mazing and you should keep writing! Luva! ~Mira |
![]() ![]() It was interesting to read from the two perspectives. Very powerful and shows how your mistakes can come back to haunt you. I feel so sorry for the wife. This was also very well written. |