|Reviews for Beef jerky|
| There-Is-No-More-Laughter chapter 1 . 5/23/2009
lol love it
| Duckies chapter 1 . 5/23/2009
This was very comical :D
You forgot the t for 'to' (first line of the large paragraph) and you wrote ~that's is~ which is redundant; just use one the terms - sorry, I'm a grammar nazi :D
I liked that the devil was advertising the beef jerky, it added to the humor of your short yet entertaining piece.
'then there was silence.' - I love that line, because it happens so often in everyday life and is very easy to imagine.
Awesome possible scenario! :P
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