Reviews for Superhero
Claire LeBoeuf chapter 1 . 12/22/2012
Holy Jesus, I think you actually made me tear up. This was...without words. It was great, all of your characters were so completely human that it made it that much more painful when something bad happened to them, and the moral of the story was so fantastic.

Really, I loved it. Great job!

WoodpeckerWho chapter 1 . 2/6/2011
This piece is extremely well written, and as a result I really enjoyed it. The plot line is somewhat original, as in doesn't have the 'invincible' superhero character. Robert's original reaction to Scott is realistic, and the change of of mind about the strange guy on his bus is somewhat thought provoking. The story represents the untold heroes - those who aren't afraid to stand up for what they believe in, which is another reason why I liked it. The pace is set well - not to fast, not to slow without needed background information.

The only constructive idea that I could give you, is to tell more of the interactions between Scott and Robert. ie. A snippet of a random conversation they were to have after the initial favourite superhero talk or something. I just feel that a better relationship could be formed between then, or something along those lines.

However, this is not my type of story at all, but at the end I was very pleased that I read it. The bitter sweet ending concluded the story perfectly, and again, I will say that the writing flow is absolutely flawless.
Violette Skies chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
[Plot]: I’ve never read anything like this. It’s such a simple idea of a real life superhero, but taken that much further. Instead of having the superhero be some kind of macho man, it turns out to be Scott, just a kid trying to do the right thing.

[Characters]: I absolutely loved Scott and Robert. For Robert, I liked that at first, he seems like just another person on the bus, ignoring the strange kid in the superhero costume. Through a freak occurrence, Robert begins to see the man behind the mask, so to speak.

[Pace]: For the most part, the pacing was good. The one thing I would have liked was maybe a bit more dialogue between Robert and Scott, just something about during their nightly conversation. I just feel like the pacing was a bit rushed in the middle: going from Robert first talking to Robert to them becoming friends.

[Ending]: I loved the ending and I fully admit it was quite touching and brought tears to my eyes. I especially love the turnaround of Robert claiming not to know Scott, to him forever letting Scott’s memory live on.
ItRemainsUnseen chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
Wow, that was ... absolutely amazing and brilliant. When I first started reading it, I almost stopped, it's not really my kind of story. But, damn, am I glad I kept reading. I didn't really think I would, but I nearly cried at the end. Scott Williams is my favorite superhero, too! Thank you for writing this. I'm going to go check out your other stuff now.
Black Cap chapter 1 . 6/18/2010
In my humble opinion, this short piece captured exactly what being a superhero is all about.

Excellent work.

- Wings
gigglebug chapter 1 . 1/24/2010
This... I... whoa.

After reading this, I honestly exhaled a HUGE amount of air because I stopped breathing. It was so well written! The amount of emotion that was portrayed in such a (relatively) short piece was just wow.

There was one part at the end though, where it said he chuckled weakly. It just seemed a little redundant.

Simply gorgeous. The characters came to life for me, and that was just awesome.


p.s. look! I got your freebie done! -
SpotWillRuleTheWorld chapter 1 . 10/25/2009
Beautiful. Long live Scott.
Geva chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
"But the truth is that Superman's got nothing on Scott Williams. Nothing."

Besides the part where Robert explains to Scott how he's even braver than Superman (which is shockingly convincing, btw), that was my favorite quote. Everything, from Scott's quirky habit of dressing as a superhero, to Robert's realistic tendency to shy away from his friend's oddness, is material that is worthy of at least being mentioned in a literature class.

Bravo, well done, awesome job, and thanks for writing this. You just made my day.
RYTwinDemon chapter 1 . 9/15/2009
Oh my goodness, I cried when I read this. Seriously. This was an amazing piece of literature that struck me, and I loved, loved, LOVED it. Excellent job, my friend. I hope you continue to write pieces like this; it's truly something that people should read.
inquietoscaeli chapter 1 . 8/18/2009
I love everything about this story! It's so well written! I especially love the message it portrays. Overall amazing story.
The Five chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
This was simply beautiful. I love the bittersweet (and incredibly touching) ending. Your characters are endearing, all the more so because they have human flaws. In particular, your description of sweet, whimsical Scott made me smile. Amazing job. I couldn't find a single thing wrong with it.
Spinning Yarns chapter 1 . 8/7/2009
That was an amazingly touching story. It seemed so real and utterly heartfelt. I liked how you made Robert wary about getting to know Scott Williams in the beginning. It really was realistic because in real life most people don't get up the nerve to talk to someone, even if they help you, like Scott helped Robert when he fell. I especially loved how you wrote Scott though. He was just an ordinary guy trying to do something extraordinary. Thank you so much for posting this. It was a marvelous read and a total pleasure.
Autumnights chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
Omg, that was so sad. I actually have tears in my eyes. It reminds me of this terrible movie called Blank Man, except this was so much better.
takenflower chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
One word, wow. This was amazingly touching. It caused shivers to run down my spine. A very quick story but very touching nonetheless. I like that he calls Robert, Robin, a sidekick but someone he believes to be there for him. And in the end, Robert was there for Scott wasn't he? Reassuring Scott that he was a superhero. A simple man who desired for the world to be a better place, Scott is a superhero from your own creations. Great job!

deefective chapter 1 . 7/30/2009
Opening: The opening line was interesting but not that much. It had that sort of sentimental feel to it that I got right away but I wasn't sure I liked it. As for the opening paragraph, the description of what Scott was like was also interesting, but again, not that much. I felt as if it was lacking something, something that would draw the reader in to keep reading even if they didn't have to.

Ending: Loved the ending line. Absolutely loved it. Such emotion and power in just two short sentences. Not to mention the fact that this was an amazing way to end a story like this. It not only stuck it to the readers mind as if the narrator was saying this to them face to face, but it definitely leaves an impression.

Dialog: Defintely believable. I liked the exchanges between Robert and Scott. It had a real tone to it, not like all this polished up "writing" speak that I find is in so many stories today.

Characters: Hmm, the characters were interesting because on one hand some were cliche but they were well written. Scott was my favorite. He wasn't cliche at all and you wrote him well. To me, as a reader, he was unbelievably likeable [of course]. As for Robert, he bothered me a bit, especially with the ending scene. He was too...normal, for lack of a better word. I found that there wasn't really anything to make him stand out in the story besides his involvement with Scott. He just seemed like a cardboard cutout of a character. I think that a little more depth would be needed to make his character believable.

Other than that though, nicely done.
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