very nice! bailey is such an interesting character. i'd love to read more of the banter between him and gwen. x3

LOL that was brilliant! have you thought of how funny this would be as a movie? i'd totally watch it! A longer version of this would be epic, but this oneshot is good. are you going to do a sequel?

I really like this story! Bailey is defiantly one of my favorite characters. Favorite!

I absolutely loved this story. It was very well written, the first-person narration was brilliant, and your characterization was vibrant. The only thing I would suggest is be wary of the rather long-and-hyphenated-phrase-adjectives you use rather frequently. Although often hilarious and well placed, the one describing the blonde floozy was a bit too much.

Bailey is amazing. He is simply enthralling...one of my favorite lines:

“That was less satisfying than I expected.”

He made me laugh out loud, and yet I could complete comprehend and understand Gwen's anger, especially at the aftermath of the "epic battle between good and evil."

Devil Dog! Where on earth did you get that idea? It's so original and... slightly weird, but I love it. Bailey is now on my list of favourite characters, please update soon (if you're going to)!

Great writing, great idea, great style.

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