|Reviews for Homeward Bound|
| christinaxxyo chapter 1 . 4/17/2010
I liked how you started it but I thought it was a little bit TOO vague. However, I'm still psyched to continue reading and find out what else happens :)
| sappyromancelvr chapter 21 . 4/11/2010
Ohmigod. This has got to be the most disgustingly cute story ever.
So good, haha.
Sean sounds so dreamy, especially with those glasses ;)
| mominatrix chapter 20 . 3/30/2010
I have stayed up for two days straight reading all your are very talented.I hope to be buying your books in the righting new storys.
| Dead Deactivated chapter 21 . 2/21/2010
AWW! I love it!
| Chocorange888 chapter 21 . 2/16/2010
Hey! I'm back for the week and decided to read one more of your creations. This story is really as great as a dramatic romance goes, very fluffy and (in my opinion) something which every girl needs to read once in a while. Thank you very much, it's made me feel much better after a very boring Valentine's day :P
| analinah chapter 9 . 2/15/2010
hey so i just realized you don't have thousands of reviews for this story and i think that's crazy! i love this story and i don't know why i haven't reviewed until now-i'm reading it for the third time. it's a wonderful story to come back to every so often, mostly because the characters are interesting, believable, and so well written that i wish i knew them (even chuck!). i love all your stories, keep writing. :)
| plumbucket chapter 21 . 2/12/2010
I really enjoyed this (so much that I even logged in to review :D)!
| Candescence chapter 21 . 2/8/2010
You're right. This story is a little cheesy, but don't worry. Isn't everything? Haha. I liked the story, it was sweet.
| Jinxed Rogue chapter 20 . 12/25/2009
Hon, the only reason to hang around FP is to get fluff and lemons! This was a good scene.
| Jinxed Rogue chapter 18 . 12/25/2009
This is a very good plot you've got going, but this Sean/Adam confrontation really didn't work. From the way you've written the characters, I felt that Sean wouldn't have admitted to actually being "in love" with Sydney, but alluded to a close relationship.
I think it worked until this point:
“What do I know about it?” Sean said, still walking closer.“I know she’s spent the entire summer trying to get over what you did to her. Do you not understand? Adam, you broke her. You didn’t just break her heart, you literally broke her.” Sean was getting angrier; I could see in the grainy video that his cheeks were flushed. “She's spent the last four months trying to figure out what is so wrong with her that you didn’t want her anymore. And she’s finally just realizing that maybe it was just you and that what happened wasn’t because she was somehow deficient.”
Adam’s eyes narrowed. I recognized the look, he often had it when he’d just figured something out; I could practically see the lightbulb go off in his head. “Guess I spoke to soon about the ‘big brother’ solidarity. Just friends, huh?”
I think that Sean tells Adam a bit too much after this point. I feel like knowing that Adam is supposed to be such a backhanded speaker, Sean would bait him out more.
| Jinxed Rogue chapter 9 . 12/25/2009
Well, I think there are tons of references to Sixteen Candles and that's from 25 years ago. I think 'When Harry Met Sally' is classic and if you can't get the reference, NetFlix it ASAP.
| Jinxed Rogue chapter 5 . 12/25/2009
I think you've displayed her broken heart pretty realistically. For so long, you can be angry and not love the person anymore, which can be just as haunting.
| Jinxed Rogue chapter 4 . 12/25/2009
This story started off a bit too slowly, but I stuck with it because it's picking up so much ground now.
| kaw97 chapter 21 . 12/12/2009
I've just finished this story and Both Sides Now and I felt a little guilty for not reviewing. They were both completely wonderful! I really appreciate good writing and it is very difficult to find on this site. LOL You are one of my new favorite authors. Please continue!
2 suggestions...(1) stop saying how bad your chapters are. Seriously! I am not a writer - just an avid reader, but I know what I like, what reads well, what is a good plot, and I love the way your stories flow and the tension you build between the characters. I love the complexity of the characters (not so black and white/all good all bad that some people try to create.) Like Adam having some true remorse, even though he may not drastically change his ways, since old habits are hard to break. Or Carolyn in BSN who wore a mask and finally was willing to admit her faults and drop the mask somewhat. That's what real people are like. Complex. Flawed. I also wanted to say that I like the slower progression of the relationship. It is nice to have characters who don't jump into bed with each other right away.
(2) Please edit more thoroughly or get a beta. (Sorry, I'm not able to volunteer.) There are quite a few typos in the story. I don't mind glossing over them, but your writing is so good that it seems a shame to have mistakes like that.
| meow123 chapter 21 . 12/4/2009
i you are a fantastic writer this is the second story of yours i have read and i enjoy them, a lot. but it really saddend me when they did not get married i thought it was very sweet of him not to beacause she didnt want too but im one of those girls who has been planning there wedding since they were like 8. but i enjoyed the story and i hope u write billions more!