You have a great voice in your writing. There are only a few places that need fixing:

When you said "...much more Cuter" that's a improper sentance. the correct wording would be "much cuter" or "much more handsome". also in the end when you say " "I have the fortune teller my twenty..." it should be "I hand".

To me, it seems like you should add in more descriptive writing to go along with the wonderful sence of voice that you have going on in your writing.

Hopefully this review was helpful to you! I can't wait to read more!

~Jillian Smoke

This is an interesting story so far can't wait to read more of it