Reviews for Clarity
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
Some of the line breaks I didn't like. It seemed to break up the flow of the lines to me. That said I really like the idea here. Inducing pain just to feel is expressed a lot in poetry, but I think your descriptions were unique and I also liked how you go specific into an act of him hurting himself (and it's not cutting). Also, it avoids the angsty tone that often plagues poems like this. Nicely done.

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