|Reviews for I'm not supposed to be here|
| yuanyuan chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
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| Lizabellhanson05 chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
Poems that don't rhyme have always amazed me...poems that don't rhyme and are really GOOD I never forget. Yours just made that list. This is awesome:)
| lenaleelover13 chapter 1 . 6/4/2009
wow... i mean, omg.
you have SO MUCH POTENTIAL!
if only i could write like that...
its kind of like poetry, but not really.
its SO COOL!
you need to write more. for me! please!
| rust phoenix chapter 1 . 6/3/2009
This works very effectively as a monologue. Very emotional and honest. The last four lines sum up the whole thing very effectively.
This seemed a bit long, you could probably cut out a few of the less strong lines, but overall good job. Keep writing!
| Acton1842 chapter 1 . 6/3/2009
Very nice. This monologue is very heartfelt. I love the line about the firend and the slave, that was a nice touch.
Loving the 'Open your eyes' line as well. I always think that the mark of a good monolouge is when it can be expressed in diferent ways; when there can be multiple interpritations and you've certianly got that here.
Well done. All the best. l x