Reviews for wilson
Isca chapter 1 . 6/5/2009
I wasn't crazy about the opening line, but it worked, considering that you switched to a more poetic style. I'd also try to break up the 'big line' a little more. Otherwise, the format is lovely and refreshing. The ending, where the speaker embraces 'bone ivory,' was incredible-such striking imagery. Keep up the good work. :)
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 6/5/2009
I love it. I think the enjambment works really well; there's this sense of calm, and then urgency, and then a slow decline into the last few lines. I liked that. And the poem itself is quite wonderful, too - "no, let's be poetic." Yeah, I get like that, too. And the last three lines are spectacular. Beautiful. Keep writing! :)