|Reviews for The Rabbit Hole|
| promesse2017 chapter 28 . 5/27
Hey! I totally enjoyed your story. It was fun, funny, and really imaginative. I loved your characters most of all though. Alice, Grey, Jericho, Butterfly, Alastor, Naomi, Gabriel, Jack, everyone! They had wonderful defined personalities, and made me laugh. There were only a few things that irked me, but other than that, this story was great.
The first being, I felt that Sophia needed to be explained in more detail. Like when Grey was in the room with Sophia, maybe you should've had him have a flashback of Sophia talking to him, and have him remember his feelings towards her, her smile, the way she acted when she talked about the ocean, how she gave him hope, etc. Then her death would've seemed more traumatic.
Last thing would be grammar and spelling. You had a few mistakes, but if you were to go over and edit your mistakes, it'd be totally fine.
Other than that, loved your story, and I'll be checking out some of your other stuff!
| It's 2015 chapter 27 . 1/23
I can't express how much I loved this story. Thank you so much for writing this - I guess you probably don't check your reviews that often anymore as this was completed nearly five years ago, but it would be great if you did read this :) and reply ;) It's amazing how you developed Alice and Grey and the other characters - all brilliantly original and wonderfully portrayed with such depth - would you consider writing a sort of sequel illustrating Jericho and Butterfly, and perhaps Alice with Grey as well? Thanks again for sharing this brilliant and unique story, looking forward to reading more of your writing! :)
| bego.oh chapter 28 . 9/5/2014
I read this story along time ago and For the past three day I've been reading it all over again and I had forgotten how incredable and well written it is! You are an amazing writer! Please keep creating more stories like this one! Good writer and hard to find! Congratulation !
| BlueRaccoonAnne chapter 1 . 7/15/2014
The best FictionPress story in it's database. Enough said.
| MusicToSleepTo chapter 28 . 5/18/2014
I really, absolutely loved your story! It was the best fantasy I've read here on FictionPress. You were very creative, making a whole world like that with cool creatures and stuff. XD I also loved your riddles. They left me thinking what would happen, and there was never a part in the story when I didn't think, what happens next? I loved the romance, especially between Grey and Alice. They make me laugh so much. I really loved that part where Alice was watching the videos of Grey, then he thought she was watching porn. XD I don't know why I liked that part, I just did. I like awkward moments. :3 You've also changed how I imagine mermaids look in my head. I love how Butterfly was so stupid sometimes (stupid in a good way), and I love the romance between her and Jericho as much as I love Grey and Alice's. It's just so cut how much they care for each other and how much they've gone through together and sacrificed so much. I cried so much when Jericho died, and of course, I was shocked when Butterfly visited his pawnshop, and he was just there, all "What are you doing?" Though I think I kind of knew that you would bring him back. Who would be so evil as to keep Butterfly and Jericho apart? :3 And about Jericho's rebirth, how does that work? Do angels like him die on earth then go back to heaven then get kicked out again and start a new life? Or do they die on Earth and stay on earth reborn but without memory? Also, I was thinking at the end, wasn't it weird how Jericho remembered nothing at all about Betterfly, but when she kissed him and told him she loved him, he said he loved her, too? If he didn't remember her, why would he say he loved her? Maybe he felt something deep inside that though he didn't remember her, his subconscious would always remember her and love her? Anyway, I really love your stories, one of my favorite male characters is Cole, though, tbh, I didn't really read Sleeping With The Enemy. I read the first few chapters, but when I skipped to the end (no, I don't like spoilers, I just wanted to see if you finished the story because I hate unfinished stories because I'm always left hanging, wondering what the ending would have been), I kinda "accidentally" scanned a bit (hey, I was curious. I was wondering who Joss would really end up with), and I saw that you paired up Joss and Jack, and left Cole there, heartbroken. I could have gone on with the story, but I didn't want to go through all that drama. It seems kind of weird to me when it's the boy who's left hurt. Sometimes I'm okay with it, but I was too attached to Cole to see him go through all the pain. I've read Rough Petals, though, and even when Cole got his happy ending (:D!), I still didn't want to see him go through all the pain. Other than that, I absolutely love your stories. Hope you keep writing! :)
| R. Ficst chapter 27 . 3/29/2014
He has his wings and he's alive but he doesn't remember her! D:
| R. Ficst chapter 9 . 3/29/2014
AHAHAHAHHA oh man. Naomi. 3
| R. Ficst chapter 8 . 3/29/2014
Ahhh! Come on Alice! Be smarter than that! Why would she blab about such specifics of the riddles when she knows there are at least some dangerous people involved?
| R. Ficst chapter 4 . 3/29/2014
The breaking and reassembly of the coffee mug is a really great detail. So far I feel like this story would work really well as a movie. The pace, characters, scenery potential, the coffee mug moment - very cinematic.
(Of course, it's a great read, too. I'm looking forward to following the rest of this journey down the rabbit hole.)
| megs chapter 28 . 2/17/2014
I really loved this story, but I hated the ending. Why would you leave me hanging like that? :'( lol please make a short story as to how their lives end together! K? Thanks! :)
| What chapter 27 . 1/13/2014
Jericho is alive? What. What. Omg thank god I think I was going to have an aneurism that Butterfly would be all alone. And how the eff can they just go back to their old boring lives?
| Wa chapter 24 . 1/13/2014
Nooo if Jericho dies and butterfly has to be immortal I'm actually going to die of sadness! They are so perfect!
| Alyson chapter 14 . 1/13/2014
I am in love with this story! It actually feels like I'm reading a real book. You are a fantastic writer! Great job! :3
| anetehftw chapter 1 . 1/2/2014
Oh my fucjbanasnafkj hahaha! :D I don't know why but I LLLOOOOVE this story...so much! Woohoo woohoo... Maybe because it perfectly fits my taste. THIS kind of fantasy, THIS kind of romance, THIS kind of adventure. :D You do need to proofread or fix the typos maybe. Hehe, that'd make the story more enjoyable. I love the ending, although Butterfly and Jericho's pierced my heart just a bit. XD But it gave me a feeling like even though Jericho didn't remember her, he somehow still loved her. 3 3 This is your first story I read, gotta check the others. ;) Love you, have a nice day
| Alex J. Carter chapter 1 . 10/19/2013
Very interesting prologue. Love the riddle. I am very fasinated my the whole "Alice in Wonderland" story. Which is ironic with the new showing starting this month, "Once Upon a Time in Wonderland". Hope I can keep your work of art seperate from the show in my mind.