Reviews for Deep Embrace |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, I just found your story yesterday and finished it today :) All I can say is that it was amazing...and so original _ LOVED it! I love Nereus ;) ... though, he's kind creepy, lol. Anyway, I'm sad to see it end. Again, LOVE IT! _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() i personally loved it. there were some errors with this chapter..and i hate that it ends without knowing what happens to her..but its a wonderful story |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really loved this story and can't wait for the continuations in your other books. The only real disappointment I had was Casimir turning into the villain when it just felt like he was being used by his Aunt. I don't know I kept hoping he'd stop and realize he was mistaken about Sedna. Also did Nereus eat him? o.o |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm glad you didn't just leave it where it was. Though, that would have been good set up for a sequel or something. I noticed that it says *Finished* now, but I'm hoping that's not true. Honestly, I'm hoping she figures it out and stays a fish. Then they could stay together and she could probably learn to control it and what not. :) |
![]() ![]() So I think you did a fantastic job with the story I thouroughly enjoyed it. A someone on here said I think you have what it takes to write aside from the obvious issues in the story. I feel like one of the things you could have worked on was the ending not the content but the way you ended it. you ended it in the climax where as I think 62 would have been a perfect ending and not really an epilogue it seems to tie everything together without anymore need of an explanation. Its not my story I just but just a suggestion. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my God Sedna i want to cry for you! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVED IT! No sequel though? What if we really really wanted it, would you somehow get it to us? not on the site of course but... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have read this story with the original posting and now this one. I have to say they were both very good. Can you please email the site you are posting the sequel on? I would love to read it as well. Keep writing! |
![]() ![]() Okay, prepare yourself for this rambling speech here. I've been stumbling around fictionpress for a long time now, and there were so many different occasions that I was scrolling down the list of updated stories and I saw the summary for this. The summary was so intriguing; often there are stories of merfolk but little can actually pull it off in a way that is not cliche. I caught it at a late time, and I convinced myself I didn't have the time to read a 60-chaptered story. This time, something just TOLD me I had to read it. I am sooo glad I did. There were times where I'd be staring at the computer screen, so enveloped in this world, that I forgot this wasn't a real book. It's just a story on a website filled with people who think they can write. And I have to tell you, YOU can. So I really hope you read your reviews, because I want you to pay attention: You NEED to have this published. It was such a great plot, and even with the grammar you noticed, I really enjoyed this story. I think you should put it out there before someone steals the story because it's absolutely brilliant. I don't know how old you are, if you even planned to be an actual author. But I definitely think you should, because you have the skills for it. You don't have to be afraid of rejection. You know how many times Harry Potter was rejected for printing before someone finally accepted it as a book? I often browse around fictionpress looking for those stories that are original and seriously make me stay up all night reading. Only a few have actually done that. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE MAKE THIS A BOOK. I can not reinforce this statement as many times as I'd like to. Go for it, because you have great potential. |
![]() ![]() I actually love the fact that Sedna was able to free Nereus. I love the plot. I'm just wondering whether or not she'll become a fish. I'd like to see how that'll work out but I'd also like to see how she'll be able to return back to human with the curse or spell thingy removed. And at first I actually didn't think that Casimir had been Nereus. I found out at the end of the last chapter. I have to say, I love this story. Everything about it. I have nothing to say badly about this story. I'm sure others might have a few to discuss, but I love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Even though the ending was kind of sad I loved it. It was so dramatic. Is sedna going to stay a fish girl or what? Please do an epilogue or a second story following. Anyways the last chapter was awesome! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So they all die? I loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, wow, wow. That was awesomely epic! I cant believe Sedna was that brave! (: can't wait for the epilogue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() WHAT? Seriously, what? For the first time, I feel really sad that I never read the previous version of this story, or of the sequels. I didn't understand whether you'd post the sequel or whether you'd just leave it like this to torture us for a while, but I beg you ... PLEASE, post the unedited sequel and let me read it. Or, better yet, e-mail it to me! I don't have time to write a very detailed review right now,but I promise I'll come back later and we'll finish this chat, missy! |
![]() ![]() Waah! what a tragic ending.. though, Seas Of Ice was a much sadder one. so, i suppose this is the end of my favorite story on fictionpress? i suppose so. god, i loved it! i realy did hate nereus first, but by ch30 i loved him. and of all female characters ever, sedna is totally the coolest XD it only took u like what, 5 or 6 months to write this? that wasnt long. i cant wait for the epilogue and anything else u write. though, i do wish u would give Briny Abyss another shot. |