Reviews for Deep Embrace |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh! This is so interesting! I wonder what will happen next? I like your writing style very much. But don't you think that Sedna should have been a little more surprised at finding the merman on the beach? Or maybe it's just me and my chicken self. Haha, I'd probably scream and run for it and call an ambulance or something lol. xD |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh my! i like the concept. I haven't read any mer- stories...most fictions are about vampires and werewolves! lol Keep up the good work.. Your writing is always spectacular! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a great idea. This story probably has one of the most original plots I've seen lately...and you're pulling it off perfectly! I can't wait to read more, you have me completely hooked. Please please update soon |
![]() ![]() I love this story. It has this vibe that just pulls you in and wants you to read the story. I'm so excited about the upcoming chapters. It's one of the few stories that's original. Good Job. xx |
![]() ![]() ![]() Psh forget fake tans and blonde hair, fins and black eyes are way hotter. I cant wait till the merman wakes up. The purpose of A/N's? To bribe readers to review. Cookies are a particularly good incentive. |
![]() ![]() Hmm ... the point of an A/N? 1) To acknowledge reviews (I know I feel special when an author gives me kudos for reviewing.) 2) Apologize for late updates (They don't have to, but most authors feel obligated to.) 3) Clear up any editing problems 4) And most importantly, to remind readers to review! So now that you've got me reviewing, I can say I really like the first two chapters! The paragraphs are a bit long, though. I find it's easier to read something with shorter paragraphs, or some short and some long. Just a suggestion! Can't wait for the next update! -Mellie |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh, I like it. Mermaids are awesome, if you do it right, and I like the mentioning of another (human) guy, and the relationship with her grandmother. I want to know who beat up the mermaid... please update! |
![]() ![]() This sounds interesting so far, like a good teen romance. You have the girl POV setup, between fantasy mermaid guy and snobby(?) Yale attendee. I can't wait to hear more about the fantasy aspect-will it be a huge moral problem or a light, funny circumstance? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is great x Super duper Loves Kelabelle~ |