|Reviews for Undiscovered|
| Hezja chapter 10 . 11/19/2009
aw i loved it ! and ohh thank god you found the file haha thank your boyfriend for me . cant wait for the next chappie :D:D xx
| Alenor chapter 10 . 11/7/2009
oh good chappie. she got gutsy at the end, very nice! can't wait for more ~ Alenor
| class.act chapter 10 . 11/7/2009
SO glad you updated. I was seriously beginning to miss the self-deprecating humour of this. I know I've mentioned this numerous times already, but I absolutely love your writing style, how you weave the humour and the seriousness and the chemistry so perfectly -almost effortlessly- together.
They are now both in so deep, I can't wait for when Poppy come back, sadistic b*tch that I am.
Spotted some typos:
-kind /of/ messy, you know?
-considering my relatives/s'/ tendency to breed like rabbits
-Noelle felt a subconscious smiling /smile/ quirking her mouth up-
-“This right here—” she flashed ... arms around her “— /is/ purely selfish.”
| PeterMoore chapter 10 . 11/6/2009
this story is amazing!
| TouchOfChaos chapter 10 . 11/6/2009
AAH! i effing LOVE this story.
i really hope you update soon.
| ihateee chapter 10 . 11/6/2009
I've been following the story and I have to say, its been great so far! Like it loads. (:
| TouchOfChaos chapter 9 . 11/3/2009
i like your story because i dunno, i think the romance between these two is more realistic then other cliched popular jock and nobody stories on FP...
UPDATE! and soon please.
| natmarie chapter 9 . 8/27/2009
Best sleep deprived conversation I've ever read. Well one of the best conversations I've read period. I loved that there was personal stuff in there with random stuff ( I like orange juice and flavored things but not oranges too ironically). Can't wait for this big date. I bet she does put out lol.
| natmarie chapter 8 . 8/27/2009
Delightful summary. Kinda bummed that she brought up high school again, but I guess it was bound to happen. What will happen next...oh the suspense.
| natmarie chapter 7 . 8/27/2009
You take a seemingly cliche event (that even Noelle mentioned) and turn it upside down with totally unique conversations. Love it and the development, even if Noelle's denial can be a little annoying ;)
| natmarie chapter 6 . 8/27/2009
I didn't think it was that bad. Sorry it was giving you trouble. I like the glimpses into the relationship between Noelle and her mom, it would be interesting to get more of that, to me anyways. The conversation with Poppy was well done as well. Very realistic. I like that you don't just center the story around the couple (not that I would mind either way). I also like how Adrian tricked her into getting three dates. I was wondering how you were going to draw it out. Clever.
| natmarie chapter 5 . 8/27/2009
I hate when that happens. When you have pieces, more notably the begining and end written and have to work on the in-between. You did a fine job, great mix of sassy and sweet and sexy. A few minor typos crept in again and some of your sentences are long and wordy, but nothing that can't easily be fixed with some reading aloud or re-reading.
| natmarie chapter 4 . 8/27/2009
The two of them do have good verbal exchanges. I thought she might be a little more resilent but hey, I gues there is uber sextual tension and he's hot and a good kisser. My resolve would probably break too. Now for the after effects.
| natmarie chapter 3 . 8/27/2009
This was great, I was trying to figure how he would pop into her life again. Wish I had the knack for dialogue you do, it's witty and realistic and creates good tension between your characters. :D
| natmarie chapter 2 . 8/27/2009
Aw. I didn't think the prologue was shameful. I really like this one, it's fun and fresh and you have a way with dialogue. Makes me want to keep reading. :)
There are a few typos here and there but nothing too major.