|Reviews for Undiscovered|
| Emilea chapter 2 . 6/9/2009
AH I LOVE THIS STORY so much already. more more more
| alineofprose chapter 2 . 6/9/2009
Personally, I love the fact you had to update asap. It makes my day better finding something worthwhile to procrastinate upon.
Last review I said it intrigued me. This review, I say that you have me: hook, line and sinker. It's at the "let's read it 3 times because I can't get enough of it" stage. Originally, I would think it rather typical for her to go all screechy on Adrian after the one night stand. but the thing is - it fits completely, simply because I can envision Noelle as the quiet nerd - with a bite.
Her boss is a pervy sleazebag (albeilt, a "nice" one) that should get demoted. *glares*
I think I've found my own weakness. Although, I haven't yet decided whether it's the story itself or Adrian. That will be deliberated upon.
I love the fact that no matter how many times I try to choose education over Fictionpress, FP always wins. Like last night. And Tonight. And probably tomorrow night. That said, I should be a little more worried when 20% of my grade is at stake. Le sigh. Personally, I wish FP was a subject. xP
You've finished on a tiny cliffhanger and now I'm rather keen for the next chapter. Such indecencies should be illegal! I.e.: please keep writing!
| Alenor chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
good prologue, can't wait to see what happens next ~ Alenor
| alineofprose chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
You've intrigued me already! I can't wait to see where you go with this - especially if Adrian has changed since highschool or whether he's the same stuck up prat with a girly reaction to being found in bed with her. Or if he doesn't remember her at all...
And I second what you've said on your author page. It's so frustrating!
Well, I better get back to studying (exam in... 2 hours), but otherwise, good luck and keep writing!
| Ms.Romantic chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
this makes me excited
| TheInsideGirl chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
The prologue is short but sweet, has left me wanting to read more and introduced the story nicely. Also, this is a weird comment, I know, but I like your use of dashes. I kind of have a thing about them. Plus, you use great words such as 'toggled'. And 'pesky'. Poppy sounds like a cool character too.
No typos, grammar errors and the like and I can already tell I'm going to like you're writing style. Yay for the popular/unpopular cliche. I'm awaiting more. x