Reviews for Undiscovered
Terras1fan-inactive chapter 15 . 4/21/2013
Oh God.

I never start incomplete stories. I thought this was complete, so I started it. Damn. It's been two years since you've posted too. I assume the story is long dead, isn't it?

Well, whenever I finish a story, and since I only read complete stories, I try to leave a review. Since writers should know what the reader enjoyed and where the problems are in the story. It's hard to give overall opinions though when you are on chapter 15 and not at the end of the saga, but I will try. Maybe in hopes that you will return and finish this story, so that I don't lie awake at night, thinking about Adrian and Noelle's relationship. (;

My thoughts are this: you are hilarious. You know just went the line is catchy, hilarious and not too much for the story. You don't litter your story with these one-liners and inner monologues. It's peppered. Seasoned well, and I loved that. I got a laugh that had me chuckling, near snorting, about every chapter. That's great. I'm getting gooey romance and a good mood from all those laughs. (;

However, I tended to not prefer the inner witty thoughts as much, but that's just personal dislike of authors providing the thoughts of characters.

I enjoy the fact that you aren't making excuses for Adrian. He was an ass, but he is a good guy. He had a wild side, and you aren't going to make some tragic bullshit up for him. He just was. I love that, period, point blank.

Noelle is delightfully witty, but the more I read, the more I yearn for her to find a purpose, a reason for existing, a career or love that isn't just romantic with Adrian. Ya know? Her life sort of sucks, with a shitty mom, a bestie who doesn't take care of her nearly as much as Noelle takes care of Poppy, and a job where she gets sexually harassed near daily. I want her to find something she wants to and at least takes pride in.

Anyways, I like where the plot is going. The development of characters was great, and I'm glad you didn't leap into "love" like most stories on Fictionpress seem to do. Love isn't an instant thing. It brews over time, and emotions certainly don't go from hate to love after a round of kissing. Ya know? So yeah, pacing is muy bueno.

Well, no matter what, even if you have completely lost inspiration with Undiscovered, keep writing. You are good at it.

Terras1fan-inactive chapter 2 . 4/21/2013
I died. I can no longer read this story: "Let's just say nothing says 'stop drinking' like waking up covered in feathers next to a man in a latex suit and a German fourteen-year-old who looks far too happy with himself."

My tears of laughter are making reading very, very difficult.
guest chapter 15 . 2/4/2013
Very nice story.I like the way you write and great characters and such a unique name,Noelle,it's very update!
dont stop chapter 15 . 1/29/2013
please keep writing. i always say a story is good when it makes you laugh one minute and cry the next because you are so involved in the content and the characters. i love this!
DuchessYappingDog chapter 15 . 11/30/2012
Aghhh I don't know if you know from my reviews, this is one of my favorite stories at the moment. It's just... I know I read it last time, but I must have been half asleep reading it at night the first time around. Or maybe I stopped in the middle for some reason. Anyways, I adore this story! It's just their romance is kind of dramatic in the beginning but it's also somewhat low key. I don't know if that makes sense. Just... I hope one day I can find someone who can deal with my crazy and have patience with me when I'm trying to let go and just allow myself to love and be love. Or at least be happy and be adored. Hururrrrr. One can dream, but it shall happen one day. Soon. Within the next 2 years, hopefully. I'm aging quickly!
DuchessYappingDog chapter 12 . 11/30/2012
The second half of this chapter is perhaps my favorite scene with them. Just so happy. She finally is allowing herself the chance at finding happiness with someone she never expected. And to find happiness and even focus on herself and her happiness. I hope that Poppy comes around. Yes, she will be upset, but she needs to get past all these things from almost a decade ago. She cannot forbid her best friend to find happiness with someone who was a douche before but who has changed and truly seems to adore her best friend... :/
LizASmith chapter 15 . 11/28/2012
Really loved the story, but I have to ask, have you really completed it? One more chapter would be good I think... though I don't know how many months (years?) it's been since you last updated... anyway, awesome work! :)
DuchessYappingDog chapter 14 . 11/25/2012
Guh they're too cute! I'm glad he's so genuine. (Couldn't think of the word for a few seconds and could only come up with "generic". D: ) So happy that she found a good one this time!
DuchessYappingDog chapter 5 . 11/23/2012
Hmm do we ever find out what happens to Taylor? I've this through once, but I also read a lot of stories at the same time. I've been re-reading this and trying to remind myself what happened.
619266 chapter 15 . 7/9/2012
I've read this story so many times I've lost count, but it always seems to amaze me each and every time. I've read the reviews and I pretty much agree with all of them. Noelle was annoying in the beginning because she held this grudge against him for so long and it was somewhat immature how she acted, but I've come to really like her as a character and understand the way she acts is somewhat because of her childhood. I have absolutely fallen in love with the characters and I don't usually like most characters that much excluding historical novels. I agree with the other readers that your story is absolutely brilliant and deserves more recognition. Also, I've found grammatical mistakes here and there, but overall your grammar is great. Your story seems so real and that's what I love about it because the characters aren't put in a certain category, so they seem like how people really are in real life. A lot of authors put the character into a cetain category and that's all they become which is a character and there's nothing that separates them from other characters. Their situation seems like what ordinary people face and it just doesn't feel like a story, but something so much more than that. I love your witty conversations because it makes a story so much better and more entertaining. I can truly say it is one of the best stories I have ever read on the internet and I've read thousands of stories on different websites and I would also say it is better than most books I have read over the years, but I still feel some books are better. With all that said, I have come up with a criticsm which is that I love dramatic stories that may make me cry or not and in that mean there is one moment that I'm so caught up in. It doesn't mean that it has to be sad. For example, there was this confrontation that was set up in the beginning of the story that they would eventually have to face, another was this couple who were driven apart by her father met after sixteen years of thinking that she was married to the person her father wanted her to marry and he was married to her sister, or it could be as simple as a man standing against the wall. It's kind of hard to explain that one, but I just mean that it could be some big thing like revealing that they are dating to Poppy and I kind of hope it does somewhat break their friendship or her relationship for that matter but then make up or something that just makes a person so into the story which usually means it's emotional. I'm not saying the other chapters weren't emotional, but it wasn't like that big moment. I also like that Adrian doesn't give in to Noelle like a lot of other male characters in other stories. Maybe in real life, men really do give in to women and accept the blame because it happens a lot in stories and people always joke about it, but it doesn't seem real so I loathe when authors continously do that. When authors put obstacles in the story, it's mostly like whatever because it's been done a million times and/or it doesn't matter because I don't really like the characters. I guess my point is that whatever obstacles you put don't seem pointless or cliche in the least and most stories that have one argument after another are definitely one of my biggest pet peeves, but with your story the arguments were on the same thing that eventually got better so it wasn't like a million different arguments about things that are so pointless or just random things. So that's kind of all I have to say and sorry for rambling; also I'm sorry if there are any grammatical mistakes. Please update soon. This story is amazing which I have already said, but I would love to see you update and I feel like there is something that is going to get in their way very soon because it seems too perfect right now. Bye.
AccountKiller12393 chapter 15 . 4/21/2012
Please continue writing :'( this is one of the first stories I ever read here and I love them as a couple
Allie chapter 15 . 4/6/2012
Chapter 16:

Adrian took Noelle to the park. They sat on the swings, holding hands talking.

"Marry me?" Adrian asked suddenly.

"Wha-yes, of course!" Noelle replied.

They lived happily ever after- having two children a boy and girl.

I reread this story often hoping you'll up date soon- so I thought of what might happen next, lol.
sunshinernnr chapter 15 . 12/13/2011
Awww.. so sad to see that this is the last chapter. I am loving this story. Plot is original and the characters are so real. I like your writing style as well- everything flows. I'm dying to read the rest, so please write more!
springdaisy chapter 15 . 10/24/2011
What a great story. I love the chemistry between Adrian and Noelle, and I love how raw her emotions are. I feel almost as if she's a real person, and I'm getting this one on one interaction with all her feelings.I really hope you'll update soon. :)
LK chapter 15 . 10/16/2011
Girl you need to update your stories! its been three months! I need my fix haha
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