Reviews for Power Trip
Drowning Ninja chapter 36 . 7/12/2012
I know I know it took me a while to read this one and I'm sorry... I guess all it took was lying on the floor of your apartment while you fell asleep on the couch leaving me alone D:

Anyways great chapter I'm off to read Gavins story! Loves you!
xfffxfxfx chapter 36 . 7/9/2012
At first I totally forgot that this is by the same author as “Arrogant and Intrusive”. It’s a very large leap ahead of that story, on every front. I have some praise and some constructive criticisms.
The first segment of the story – up until about the party where Brecken spends his whole night trying to find Gavin – is just amazing. Your grasp of the psychology of your characters is very real and complex. Your characters breathe with life, seem to be very individual people as well as fitting into broader types. The careful and believable unfolding of the plot is excellent. I wouldn’t hesitate to consider this among the best slash fiction on FP.
You can probably see the big fat ‘but’ coming up already. But… the second segment presents many difficulties. I can’t say exactly where the first segment becomes the second, but I only realized it was happening after the scene with the party because: a) I no longer understood Brecken’s motivations, and therefore couldn’t empathize with him the same way I did before, b) Colin seemed to change wholesale into another character, after having disappeared for a while, c) Gavin was in a band. Okay, that last point wasn’t very important.
The significance of understanding the motivation of the characters: in a recent chapter, you remarked about how Brecken is a douchebag. That hasn’t changed, from the beginning to the ending. However, in the beginning, I clearly understood his actions and emotional responses. He swells with power over Gavin, but then feels regret. He vacillates from one position to another, but in a perfectly human way. At some point though, there was a distancing, and we no longer were privy to why Brecken acts the way he does. He is so jealous it’s crazy, but instead of saying to myself “Aha, he’s jealous, and I know why,” all I can say is “He sure is jealous. The douchebag.” His motivations have become opaque. They seem to come from nowhere, and go nowhere. To be frank, it seems like you put him in a certain mood because it’s convenient for you, rather than because it follows from what’s going on.
And the point around Colin is important. Colin represented more than just himself; he was a stand-in for all the parts of school and society that Brecken feared when he denied he was gay (ish). If Colin really had no issue with it, and nobody else did either, then what was the point? Why was he so afraid? If he was just overwhelmed with unrealistic anxieties, that would be one thing, but you don’t account for that either.
So, we can see that my main criticisms are structural. The story progresses around a tightly laced and well thought-out structure, where every event leads to the next; but then it dissolves into uninteresting side characters and small episodes that feel like reruns of chapters that were filler to begin with. This is what my frustration with Colin and my frustration with Brecken’s motivations come back to – instead of their personalities, wants, and desires playing out to create the plot, they are divested of all of these and made into puppets, into almost parodies of themselves.
So this might sound discouraging. Keep in mind that I don’t think this second section is awful – it’s not nearly as fulfilling as the first section but it still held my attention, and had its own gratifications. I think it makes the most sense that if you do agree to my criticism, you can just accept that that’s how this story played out and keep these thoughts in mind for the next story. This latest chapter really threw me – while you were hinting at the content for a while, the last sentence fell on my like a ton of bricks, so clearly you’re still doing things well.
ScarletFlame23 chapter 36 . 7/8/2012
I need a sequal! When is that coming out?
L. Arthur chapter 36 . 6/18/2012
Wow this story is definitely taking me on one wild and crazy...trip lol sry couldn't help it. but seriously, I am so into this story. I like to go back and reread this story from the beginning just to try and understand the relationship between the two characters. It's incredible. Lives are so fascinating, I honestly can't wait for what comes next . I'm completely clueless and loving every second of it. love the originality

Keep writing, and please look out for Gavin. He's been through so much already. Hey both have I guess.

jeg lrer mig dansk chapter 23 . 6/15/2012
When Auden said, "mrs. Grace Waters," I realized that if Gavin were to take Brecken's last name, he would share a name with a gay porn star... don't ask me how I know that. Great story, though!

My name is Danish for "i'm learning Danish."
pl chapter 36 . 6/15/2012
A LITTLE MORE THAN A YEAR? what does this meeeaaan
Stahlut chapter 36 . 6/9/2012
Ah I love this story so much. The characters all just inspire so many different emotions, I go from liking them to hating them, and then being confused. I've laughed and felt angry and all those wonderful emotions that make it obvious that you have really enjoyed a story. And yes it is true, I have really enjoyed reading this so very much. SOOOOO all I can say now is that I really really want you to update soon so I don't go completely crazy waiting.
R.P. Ann chapter 36 . 6/6/2012
I loved it. It was harsh, and angry and perfect. Pretty good chapter.
binnyboo chapter 36 . 6/6/2012
not expected oh lordieee :') MY HEART OMG
mamaliz chapter 36 . 6/6/2012
I just discovered this story and read it all in one day. I really like it a lot and cannot wait to find out what happens after that year had past. I think maybe it could've been nice if there had been a chapter or so in which they were in a proper relationship before this dramatic break up. Please update soon!
Def chapter 36 . 6/4/2012
oh my holy shisus, what is this, nooo *is incoherent*
calamity jane chapter 36 . 6/4/2012
Oh no, what happened to my boys! Ugh, now I'm on pins and needles needing to find out more about Gavin's past, and whether or not Nick was full of bs or not.

A whole year! I'm assuming Nick got his drummer back and they finally got a recording contract?

Anyway, great writing as usual, you really know how to pull the reader's emotions in multiple directions, all at once even! One sec I'd be feeling bad for Breck and mad at Nick, then bad for Nick and mad at Breck, and don't even get me started on poor Gavin!

Keep up the awesome work and I hope you are inspired enough to update soon!
calamity jane chapter 35 . 6/4/2012
Oh how I have missed these guys! You had my emotions on a roller coaster ride from beginning to end on this chap. I started out with high hopes for them and worried by the end (biting my nails).

Thanx for the update!
linuen chapter 36 . 6/4/2012
*le gasp*
Turquoise Mage chapter 36 . 6/3/2012
interesting chapter it's been a while too well till the next one see ya around.

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