Oh Brecken...you certainly will get what you deserve...

Great work!

I deserved to skip out on the project. *slap in the face*

I deserved the good grade. *punch in the face*

I deserved to get into the Semi-Finals again. *kick in the stomach*

I deserved the extra bit of pleasure with no strings-attached. *kick in the groin*

I was Brecken Waters. I got what I deserved.

*he falls to the ground*

I just had to do that lol. Anyways. I'm exhausted after beating up the fictional character so I'll just say it's a really good story. Well done, congrats, good luck, all in order. So...well done, congrats and good luck. ;]

Eep, i love it, love it, love it! I can't wait for the next chapter. :)

omg please write more this is so good and i want to now what will happen between them plez. i can't wait. :-)

Oh evil! I love it! And you are so right about the aldrenaline thing :D. Keep writing!

Gah, can't wait for the next chapter! -

I really wanna know what goes on in Gavin's head.

Keep on writing~!

~:O oh emm ge. i must know what happens next! . x] good story!

i like it (:

Brecken, you're one stupid son of a gun.

Wow this is great! Great work here

dont do it brecken! dont let collin influence you! x]

very god!

they were so mean to gavin in the beginning :[

keep writing~!

Okay, completely westernized haha. I don’t mind, kind of interesting. Besides, the setting is in the US so I don’t have anything to complain about.

Oh and I wanted to mention this in chapter two review but I forgot. I guess you wanted the reader to assume that Breken is your typical jock that gets bad grades and procrastinates. Personally, I was a little confused at first since he is the star of the soccer team. I guess it’s just culture differences. You see, when I was taking classes in Japan, jocks usually get the best grades. Boys who don’t get good grades usually are delinquents who don’t do any sports activity. I guess that’s different here in the states. I know _; I feel weird whenever I got to Japan; it’s like a completely different world.

So I thought maybe you should elaborate that. However! When I read this chapter, I was more comfortable with the characters. Especially by Collin’s reaction.

Anyways, keep writing and make the next chapter longer please, at least 20 words.

Yeah. Yeah. I know this is suppose to be short but … but … why can’t it be longer?

Anyways, I don’t know, the more I read this story, the more I feel it doesn’t belong in the manga section. Maybe it is just my foreign influence. Perhaps this story should be in young adult, humor, or even romance. But then again, manga could be about anything so that’s fine. That’s the thing about stories, where you can find out how it relates to the author in many ways.

You are right about it being a series of drabbles. Quite short.

Was there a trigger in the first story? Because the “confessionist” SHUT UP MICROSOFT, THAT IS SO A WORD! was frightened at first but then he was calm. I wonder why.

Going to favor this for now and off to the next chapter.

I like this. Eager to know whats going through Gavin's head though. Thank you for posting! :)