Reviews for whiskyrainolivia |
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![]() ![]() ![]() It has a interesting concept that when people (myself included) think about, we never really think about it if you get what I'm trying to say. You explored it and made it really believable rather than over-dramatic. Good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() so sweet..i hope he keep on living for Olivia :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your imagery was fantastic, I MUST say. This is a fantastic stand-alone piece, I don't even want to know what happens, it might ruin it. Very mysterious. Also, you did really well on the present tense. Most authors don't, is all. |
![]() ![]() ![]() The imagery was awesome, and I love the way you depicted the accent. You also pulled off the present-tense really well. Kudos. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Some truely amazing imagery in this piece. And the plot, the plot is fantastic! The May-December romance also holds a particular appeal for me, and adds something more to the plot. It helps to set it aside from ordinary romance fiction pieces. A very distinguished piece of writing which illustrates a true talent for the written word. Also, I think I prefer this as a standalone piece, even though I'm dying to know what happens to Olivia and what choices she makes. The air of finality and mystery adds to the illusion in the plot, and really pulls it together as a beautifully written piece. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Now - I'll tell you what I think, because I was drawn to this story by the summary. [Although the prospect of a returned review is delicious, I am reviewing this because I would've anyway.] Your writing is somewhat Marguerite Duras-like, a bit like wading through honey while I'm reading. Taking a slow drug, if you will. This is a good thing. It's actually quite an incredible thing to manipulate time like that for a reader. It's something I think you should keep working on. In short, I thought it was good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is just beautiful. I think what I like the most is the way your hyper-vivid descriptions bring us into the moment the same way that Olivia is in it; it's clear that she's groping her way from snapshot to snapshot because the situation she's in is too traumatic to allow her to think in the long term. Your prose isn't just pretty words painting pretty pictures, though it certainly is that - you're showing us without telling us how damaged she is, how thin the line is that she's walking. And that's an amazing accomplishment, especially in the few words you've allowed yourself here. Love the fic as a standalone, but wouldn't mind following Olivia farther down the garden path, either. Brava. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like how you describe things, you are very good at your use of descriptive terms. As the story progress I felt bad for Olivia, I wonder what she will do after he dies. I can't wait for the next installments. |