Reviews for I can't see the stars
MissGreySunshine chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
This was a cute, short, poem.

I liked this poem because although it uses so little words, I could see little quarter and eighth notes bombarding a heart, which caught me off-guard. So, very good imagery.

I also liked it when the last line is very good at showing the juxtaposistion between two feelings a "heart" can feel at once.

The one thing that bothered me was that it could have used some more punctuation to show the reader, more effectively, how the phrases were set up, because it is a poem and sometimes that is unclear.

Good job!

-MGS-
Unique1952 chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
Nice, I really like the subject and I'm a fan especially of the last line: Almost forgotten yet not rememebered. I think it would've been nice had it been a little longer and been able to flow a little better but overall this is nice.