|Reviews for Someday|
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 8/8/2009
[Is it a way full of roses with thorns?
Is it a way full of thorns with roses?] I love those lines. So thought-provoking.
[Actually the difference no matter] This seemed off grammatically. Maybe “doesn’t?” instead of “no?”
[never to lock back] lock look?
Nice concept as a whole. It seems to be about a relationship at first, but then you broaden it so much with the line “Life is so, right?”
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(Ah, sorry, I just looked at your reviews and noticed that this is almost exactly the same as Mini’s ;)
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/7/2009
"Actually the difference no matter"... Awkward phrasing "Actually the differen't doesn't matter" or "Actually, it doesn't make a difference" would be better
"meanwhile I choose never to lock back."... look
"Cos it's a way without roses, it's just thorns"... 'Cause
I like the whole rose/thron thing. You discuss it in a different way than I usually see. Nice job!
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| Unique1952 chapter 1 . 7/6/2009
Someday I'll count all the stars in the sky,
maybe we'll meet there again as we used,
meanwhile I choose never to lock back.
I love this!
| Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 7/3/2009
Lovely piece, what else can I say? :) Keep writing!
| Isca chapter 1 . 6/14/2009
"Maybe you'll understand me a little more." The tone of this line is so sorrowful. It's sad that people often misunderstand each other and miss out on a lot of good relationships.
"It's a way without roses." Beautiful line. Sometimes 'the road less taken' is the better path to choose. :)
| Erlkoenigin chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
I hope it's Is it a way full of roses without thorns!
A beautiful song!
| Lilja Ruusu chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
Someday... Wait for
I loved that line, it was beautiful to me. Great poem!