Reviews for Someday
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 8/8/2009
[Is it a way full of roses with thorns?

Is it a way full of thorns with roses?] I love those lines. So thought-provoking.

[Actually the difference no matter] This seemed off grammatically. Maybe “doesn’t?” instead of “no?”

[never to lock back] lock look?

Nice concept as a whole. It seems to be about a relationship at first, but then you broaden it so much with the line “Life is so, right?”

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(Ah, sorry, I just looked at your reviews and noticed that this is almost exactly the same as Mini’s ;)
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/7/2009
"Actually the difference no matter"... Awkward phrasing "Actually the differen't doesn't matter" or "Actually, it doesn't make a difference" would be better

"meanwhile I choose never to lock back."... look

"Cos it's a way without roses, it's just thorns"... 'Cause

I like the whole rose/thron thing. You discuss it in a different way than I usually see. Nice job!

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Unique1952 chapter 1 . 7/6/2009
Someday I'll count all the stars in the sky,

maybe we'll meet there again as we used,

meanwhile I choose never to lock back.

I love this!

Nice work!
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 7/3/2009
Lovely piece, what else can I say? :) Keep writing!

Anna _
Isca chapter 1 . 6/14/2009
"Maybe you'll understand me a little more." The tone of this line is so sorrowful. It's sad that people often misunderstand each other and miss out on a lot of good relationships.

"It's a way without roses." Beautiful line. Sometimes 'the road less taken' is the better path to choose. :)
Erlkoenigin chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
I hope it's Is it a way full of roses without thorns!

A beautiful song!
Lilja Ruusu chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
Someday... Wait for

I loved that line, it was beautiful to me. Great poem!