| Reviews for Jailbait |
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   dorome chapter 9 . 7/9/2009 I just started to read this story, and i have to say i like it. I really like Simon and i definitly want to know more about Damian. So please keep writing! |
| dreamercrys chapter 9 . 7/8/2009 Dang I think Damian has a major case of foot in mouth...lol He seems to just blert out whatever he is thinking...it is very amusing. And I hope he realizes he isn't stupid he has just had a hard life and needs some help getting back on track...with school and with his "love" life... |
| cocorolla chapter 8 . 7/8/2009 :D I've become quite interested in this story and am quite excited for the next chapter. :D Great job! I'm not entirely sure how to feel about Damian/Red, but I Love Simon and his dogs, Lord and Lady. D |
| dreamercrys chapter 8 . 6/28/2009 I care, I care, I care! I love this story! I'm glad Damian is okay. I hope things start looking better for him... He shouldn't have to put up with that shit...he's only 15... Can't wait for more... |
| dreamercrys chapter 7 . 6/25/2009 Aww... I'm so glad someone wants to take care of Damian... Can't wait to see how them living together works out... |
| dreamercrys chapter 6 . 6/23/2009 Very interesting story... Can't wait to see how the two of them living together is going to play out... I love it! |
| iTsukiko chapter 4 . 6/19/2009 ... You are lovely, and I love this story. D: |
| Abweichung chapter 3 . 6/18/2009 I can't honestly said "Good job" yet, but I didn't spot any technical errors. A large factor in keeping this story at the "okay" level for me is the lack of rising action. I didn't find anything that made me want to know the characters on a deeper level... and they've barely revealed anything as it is. Bob wasn't much of an asshole and Red wasn't much of a cutie. That's all my personal opinion, but I do think your writing flows very well. Maybe just add some rising action or something that makes the main characters stand out? |