|Reviews for Erestina: Unification|
| TOMB37 chapter 1 . 10/23/2009
Your story flows exceptionally well and you have a healthy level of dialogue which I personally find hard to create. Please continue to write as it is a captivating story and I am eager to learn what happens.
| emberwing chapter 1 . 10/23/2009
Wow, I've only read the first chapter but this is looking great! This is my first review really so I can't really put advice and stuff. So yeah, keep up the god work!
| Bickazer chapter 1 . 10/13/2009
Already, I've become hooked by this story. It does seem to have a fairly cliche plot-boy is chosen one who must save the world, blah blah blah-but you put your own wonderfully unique twist on the plot. I especially love the humor, and how reluctant James is about being a hero. His interactions with Louisa are a pure joy to read.
The plot seems to be shaping up to be an interesting one, too. I love the way you had the characters explain the deal with the spirits-technically, it /is/ an info-dump, but done naturally through the characters' dialogue instead of all foisted on the reader in one long unbroken paragraph that destroys the narrative flow. I can't say that the plot is the most original, but then again, in many cses it's not the ideas that matter, but the execution. And currently you've got a wonderful execution. I have to say I really love how James is affiliated with rain; most main characters are affiliated with fairly stereotypical elements like fire and wind, so it's great seeing you take a different spin on it.
I would like a little more backstory on the village and James, but so far that's the only thing I'm missing. Great job, I'll be sure to stick around for more.
| McFisticuffs chapter 4 . 6/16/2009
Ha! you're good at the hidden humor thing.
| masakoxXX chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
This feels very epic. i'm excited to read more.