I just got done re-reading this the other day. :) It is a bit more lemony than I remember. But I love the story line and characters are nicely developed. I wish that Carly and Keaton's story line didn't end so abruptly...but understand that the story ending was a good place for Courtney and Thomas. :)

Whilst I really like this story Carly is just annoying. On/off/on/off she's indecisive and every time she says something concerning a guy she makes a liar out of herself - it's never ending and then she ends up cheating. I hope she gets dumped. Permanently.

Love this story hope there is more to come. I keep checking in to see if you have written anything else. Hopefully you do... Great job!

James is an asshole I hope Carly and Keaton end up together

I really like your story, when I read it a kept thinking: why can't all relashionships be this way? So honest, *sight*, I love the allegory to an actual famous book, making it obvius witch one is it without saing it... Another couple of things: Disneyland is defitly THE place to meet the love of your life and I want a guy who buys me Manolos too!

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Hey I really like this book but it does feel likes it dragging on a bit nothing really has happened in ages I mean yes stuff happened but nothing that exciting everyone knew that at some point there would be a threesome and everyone knew that at some point there was going to be a fight I'm just saying that since the Brady stuff nothing to interessing has happened maybe you should just finish it thats better than dragging a completly dead book out.

Just saying x

Drama...boy oh boy...Carly, I can't believe she would sleep with James again. Sigh.

All in all I thought it was a good story. A little long, and lot's of typos and grammatical errors. If you could get a beta to fix those it would be good. I did enjoy your story though.

Yay! Carly and Keaton talked! They are working it out...double Yay!

That was very sweet of Courtney to talk to Forrest. She is basically leaving it up to him to be nice now and make it up to Thomas. Smart woman!

It sucks that people just couldn't leave them alone, especially on a cruise where you are more or less held captive. Trust and trust.

Wow Thomas is wonderful getting Taylor Swift to sing at the reception. I still wish that Carly would talk to Keaton and straighten things out between them...sigh! Fun times at the Park!

Carly's feelings about Keaton kind of give me whiplash! Whatever! LOL! What a fairytale place to be married in. I am glad that Valerie apologized and that Forrest was not invited to the wedding. What was that about the key from Carly?

Brady and Courtney's relationship has changed...it's not a bad thing...just different. I am glad they talked.

I didn't know why they didn't pick Disneyland first! It's where the magic started!

I was alway wondering why Thomas and Courtney always used condoms and she didn't go on birth control. That's a long time using condoms. Thomas getting a vasectomy is pretty permeanent. Since they don't want children it's the least invasive way of stopping pregnancy.

Nice birthday present!

Yay Brady is gone...let's party!

There's another reason to be pissed off at Brady. The boys were a plan...and man what an elaborate plan to get Courtney into bed with him. He probably bribed the room schedular to make it so he had to room with Courtney! Gah! Yeah...like ducks...just let it roll off your back.

Well Courtney seemed very organized with the girls and check in times...it's too bad her charparone didn't follow the rules. LOL!

Well I am glad that Thomas took care of Forrest...though it is a bit sad too...Forrest was suppose to be Thomas's friend. So is Keaton trying not to be so in Carly's face? His attention and plans last time did them in...does Carly know what she really wants?