I feel like there shOuld be more to this story, maybe a sequel or another chapter or something?

Very compelling beginning. I was thrown off at first by the mention of her father's pack. I wish the magic of her life had been more gradualized, though not the dreams. Please continue!

interesting...very interesting

That was really well written. I loved how you never said anything straight out...everything was hinted at. Just be careful not to make everything so obscure that it misses some of the semi-large points! Other than that, it was wonderful. Hoping for a sequel. :)

I like the way that you have subtley introduced the magic side to your story: the hints about her father work well. Your writing style is interesting. The present tense for when she is younger is unusual and it carries the passing of time well. Make sure that your paragraphs do not become too much like a list however! You could add a little more description of characters and surroundings to slow the story down and add more depth to it.

Looking for Bliss. x.