|Reviews for Killing for a living|
| light.and.darkness.angel chapter 2 . 6/18/2009
hmm i like it, i really do though you could make the chapters a bit longer, annd also, i like that you're descriptive, but don't give it to us in one dense paragraph for example,
a beautiful red haired woman stood at the board, she was interupted when there was a knock at the door, her curious brown eyes lit up, "anna you decided to join public school!"mrs freight, i learned was my new math teacher. she looked quite young for her age.
i kind of rushed thought that but truly i really do love this story and i'm interested to see where it goes, i love the plot and i like how anna's character is turning out, you don't have to follow my advice, every author has a different style but i just thought i would suggest it, haha :) please update soon
| K.M. Warth chapter 1 . 6/17/2009
The description caught my eye immediately and you definitely have an interesting idea here.
However, your sentence structure isn't good. Most of your sentences are really choppy and that makes this hard to read.
This is my own personal opinion, but I think a story is more interesting if things are slowly revealed about the character and the setting as it goes along, instead of just coming out and saying it all at once.