Reviews for When Things Come Undone
Opheliac in Me chapter 8 . 11/22/2009
updae please
castiel89 chapter 8 . 8/29/2009
So... I am completely hooked on this story... Are you going to put in more music videos anytime soon? I really enjoy them. I cannot wait for Marcus to find out the truth!

Anxiously awaiting your next update!
deathanddawn chapter 8 . 7/21/2009
so iv come to the end of all that you've written so far :( that bit about gabriela (sp?) was soo sadd... if u get me. and are marcus and Korey now 'together'?

update very soonn :]

deathanddawn chapter 7 . 7/21/2009
those emails from Marcus to 'Kay'... so cute :]

deathanddawn chapter 6 . 7/21/2009
oh... english... and marcus... itz not fair... i want something like that to happen during english to me :]

deathanddawn chapter 5 . 7/21/2009
woww! this chapter... and CRYSTAL :o


deathanddawn chapter 4 . 7/21/2009
kool chapter


i like the italian :]

deathanddawn chapter 3 . 7/21/2009
nothing much to say here...

deathanddawn chapter 2 . 7/21/2009
so iv read this chapter... and thatz soo kooll... about the band and all... although i think that they should try and write an original song...

deathanddawn chapter 1 . 7/21/2009
hey! great start! this sounds soo funn... so now onto chapter :)

A. Watts chapter 8 . 7/21/2009
Great story! I can't wait for more!
As Daylight Fades chapter 8 . 7/21/2009
I've always wanted to see Employee of the Month...

I needa buy it some time XD

WTH. I hate people like Gabriele x.x

Atleast he went to jail :D

And yes, your background was awesome. You have a pretty good reason to feel smug ;D

Update soon!


BCB chapter 2 . 7/21/2009
Check all your spelling, I mean you spelled threw and not through.

That's a huge part of a good story: good grammar. And uh I don't like this storyline, but I'm not going to read it, so that's good.

And it's all in the summary, that baits people. I wasn't a fan of the summary, and mainly the whole youtube fame being desirable.

But you wrote what you knew, props to that.
cndysweetmss chapter 2 . 7/21/2009
Really Good!:
As Daylight Fades chapter 7 . 7/17/2009
You're better than me at updating!

And YAY, More Italian!

I'm just back from HP - Again. Late reply, sorry .

Ah, the common denial. and I like the email twist on Youtube. Sure, she should have realised, but I guess because it was a hunch about marcus who she is certain she doesnt like (and vice versa)then it was easy for her to shrug off

I think about things too much .

Update soon!


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