Reviews for Unrequited, and Stolen as Well |
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![]() ![]() ![]() so sad :( |
![]() ![]() I was looking over your old FanFiction story that I kept in the haven of my USB key from prying eyes (or you deleting it) but I’m really not sure if your writing level has increased or not due to the tutor. In reality, I have no word for the whole situation for I am younger than you and more or less, inexperienced. So here is yet another useless review: I feel sorry for the girl; hopelessly in love with one who doesn't care for her emotions. Ah, well if it was all 'lovey-dovey' and he says, "My answer is...yes, I do." I would die. One, you don't write those sort of things and second, I really dislike those kinds of fairytale-like endings; like an over-ripened strawberry that is too mushy to eat while yours is like a fruit sprinkled with sugar and when you suck on it for too long you get this bittersweet taste and then you realize you are sucking on a lemon. I like those stories; it's more like a taste of life, eh? Please continue writing. I have not reviewed your other story for I believe you think my criticism is unnecessary, no? ~ Dawn’s Seigyoku |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very descriptive and interesting. The ending was sad but it makes me want more...Perhaps the boy fell for the girl later on the story? But you write what you want, it's your story and it's different...By different, I meant most stories always have a happy ending and/or is easy to know that the boy will end up with the girl but this story's end wasn't what I expected. So my best way to describe this story with one word is: different. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love the way you use detail and description, its amazing. AND THE END! omgosh. i truly didnt think he would say no. ouch. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i personally liked it! i dont know what it is but most of the time i like a sad ending. so we're in the same boat. |