Reviews for The Man on the Side of the Freeway
candiesnbunnies chapter 1 . 7/15/2009
I don't know why exactly but I really (as in really really) liked this story. Really original and well written, but what I liked the most was the man on the side of the freeway :D
Miffle chapter 1 . 7/9/2009
Oh wow, I love it! It's so well written and moving and funny and very very cute. And kinda beautiful too, in the inclusion of the homeless guy and how she interacts with him. Keep up the fabulous work D
Dot Cubed chapter 1 . 7/8/2009
Dude this was absolutely incredible! I'm not sure why I love it so much, but I just do. I love the emotions in this piece-especially with Autumn and the man on the freeway, because haven't we all seen that man? And don't we all do what she does initially-not make eye contact? It seemed very real and I loved it.

OMG, I laughed really hard at Mason and Autumn's break up speech thing, and I'm not sure why. I think Mason is my favorite character in this entire thing, even if he is way too passive.

And I love Jacob, too, especially the way he progresses in Autumn's eyes. At first, she doesn't even know his name, but then he becomes something more. Love it.

One little nitpicky thing: how old are these characters? Old enough to live by themselves? I was a little confused because initially I thought they were teenagers but then in the end Autumn mentions going to "our apartment," which I guess is hers and Jacobs? That was just something that stuck out for me. Besides that, though, this was absolutely brilliant.
Airhead chapter 1 . 7/5/2009
Sounds a bit hippie-like, but I love it. I think I love Jacob too. I'll find my Jacob, I think. Nevermind, I should go to sleep, I'm starting to sound blonde. And I am blonde, but whatever. Love! chapter 1 . 6/30/2009
And I loved one more line. "Jacob groans and my heart is warm like bare feet on the summer sidewalk."

It makes me sigh happily. Really happily. Thank you! Your writing really makes me happy sometimes.

By the way, am I not totally ninja? What with the logging out and posting another comment because I failed to include it in the last one?

Another by the way... I really like the word "impish"!

It's adorable, right?

(you're supposed to say "totally" because we already disagreed on the "chuckling", so I have a shitload of ammunition against you, buahahah) chapter 1 . 6/30/2009


I'm not sure which.

this was really sweet.

And sad. And happy. And cheery but really really sad.

And really really happy, too.

Such a bewildering situation I'm in. I feel both.

Uh... Eh... Anyway! I really loved it! Jacob and Autumn and the man. And his eyes and Jacobs smile and her colorful sunshine and sky.

And man, I loved this line!... (uuh...)

["No, it's just that—well, my last girlfriend never let me pay for anything. It was pretty annoying."

I chew on a soggy fry thoughtfully. "Ah, the chauvinist and the feminazi. That's cute. Why'd you break up?"]

Lines, I guess.

But her response, mainly. The chauvinist and the feminazi. Definitely interesting and awfuly wordish in that amazing sense that makes you smile.

You know what?

Everytime I read something you write, I totally feel it, no matter be it sad or serious or totally hilarious. Then I read your A/N, see the "YAYAYYAA" there and crack up no matter which emotion I was feeling.

Then I crack up like a rabid raccoon, like I'm in some super-evil-spy movie when an idiot ducks into his hand and... cracks up. Well. Uh. Eloquence. You know how it is :)

Anyway, then I stop cracking up and kind of let the story settle.

I just wanted to let you know that the whole "YAYAYA" makes me laugh and grin and imagine a crazy bitch jumping around a fire with an axe.

But the sky is colorful and it makes me want to drink lemonade. I'd let you build the stand. I just wanna get sticky, mate.


Thanks for sharing!

Your stealth and guilt is appreciated. I loved it.

Bittersweet and funny.

WhenItRains chapter 1 . 6/29/2009
That was really cute. When I read the summary, it seemed sad so I was hesitant to read this, but I'm glad I did. I like it.
Lily Llynn chapter 1 . 6/29/2009
I'm a little uncertain how the homeless man ties into their romance, but I guess it's because she cares? I don't quite know? But this was very cute and sweet and creative and quirky and I loved it, and I'm very glad the wicked monkey added this to our c2. (:
NoieD chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
I really enjoyed this. The characters were engaging and actually displayed a depth of emotions often missing in one-shots. Good job.
blurrylights chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
I really loved was just so emotional for me, for some reason. I loved how you used the man on the side of the freeway to embody all her emotions. You really just did a beautiful of the best one-shots I've read on this site. Awesome job. :)
AngelicaStone chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
Hey! :D

I CRIED in this , I did.

I can't help but want to cry whenever I see street children/adults. And in my country, we have a lot.

I swear, I started bawling my eyes out at:

'I roll down my window and hand the man ten dollars, a bag of Doritos, and a note that says, "Sorry for all the other times."

I look him right in the eye, too. Those eyes are blue and sad and full of gratitude, and mine are burning and welling up in tears when he whispers a dusty, "God bless you."'

I swear, I started wailing to the point that the people around me looked at me weirdly.

Your writing style is extraordinary. I could just read this over and over again.

Thanks for the AWESOME read.

Hearts and Hugs!

Angelica S.

PS.I just read that little snippet I put in the review, while rereading my review, and I swear,I cried again!
Kelsci chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
I just want to say that this was beautiful. You have a great's very poetic. I love how all the seemingly unrelated elements actually connected in some way. I also love how real and amazing Autumn is, and how I can relate to her. This was more than just a romantic had substance. You don't find that often in one-shots. A full, complete, feeling that makes my stomach dance.

So thank you. This was great, and I hope you continue to write so beautifully.
goldenspork chapter 1 . 6/26/2009
Oh, wow, I liked this. You combined two totally different ideas. Plus the whole "he says he loves me and then I hang up on him" was cute. :)

I've totally done that, running into someone when biking. My friend and I were on a canal path and I said "river side" 'cause that's what side I was coming up on, and she moved over to that side, causing me to run into her, our bikes to flip, and my other friend to nearly wet herself laughing at us. our teacher was freaking out. :)

I liked it though, a lot. It bears repeating.
Elizabeth chapter 1 . 6/26/2009
This was absolutely beautiful. Jamiebell, you said it right, "You just made my heart hurt. In a really, really good way."

I was forcing back the moisture in my eyes because I had to keep reading.

This was so well done and it just gave me so much hope. And yes, I agree, there is something about the summer. And lemonade stands.

You put amazing quality in your work. The character's voice is so strong. I just can't get over it.

softrequiem chapter 1 . 6/26/2009
I love summer and I'm glad that it's here :) Very cute story.. I loved the imagery and detail. Great job!
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