I like this version. It is a modern retelling of an old fairytale, that goes back to the root of all fairy tales; cautionary tales meant to keep kids and young people from doing something stupid and getting themselves killed.

Very nicely done :3 good twist in a sorta realistic fantasy way lol. if that made any ounce of sense.

i love the way this story moves. Very awesome and original take on the story. Instant favorite.

I loved this. Very cute. I rather like the way your sentences flow.