|Reviews for Room 475|
| Grenna-Chae chapter 16 . 8/13/2009
My choice would be "Walking on Air" by Kerli. I don't know if Grace said the same thing, but, hey. I'm not going to check, because if she did say the same thing, I can just be like 'hey, I didn't know' and pretend to be cool like that.
No, don't re-write it. I'll be mad.
Agree with Chasing Cars. Its a good song, fitting for this.
Anyways, the lyrics to the song I'll send you in a PM or something.
Excellent job with this one. Tons of emotions.
| Brenda Agaro chapter 16 . 8/13/2009
I like the part about the balloons and the ending was good too - I like the onomatopoeia there.
Poor Goldie. D: It's a good thing he got rescued in time.
To me, the song you chose for this chapter fits. :-)
"He halfheartedly nudged Bernie's hand, who's arm was around my neck—and who's palm was resting on Jonah's face." I believe who's should be whose.
"It twitched three times before flipping to it's correct side and swimming in a figure eight." its.
"“Yeah, see you,” I responded softly, and Bernie slammed Charles back door before climbing into his own truck." Charles's.
"I willed myself to befine." be fine.
| xXxMidnight-BluexXx chapter 16 . 8/13/2009
gives jonah the ebils*
| fuzzy-logik21 chapter 16 . 8/12/2009
so, loved the chapter. (and welcome back, by the way!)
i like that you included not only Becka's thoughts but Jonah's as well with the balloon conversation.
the house vs. home bit was sweet as well. :)
I'm looking forward to the next update!
(sorry about the short review... i've got leverage to watch!)
| Autumn's Addiction chapter 16 . 8/12/2009
This chapter made me thoroughly depressed
But in a good way, because I really, really liked it!
... Um... Does that make sense at all? No, probably not, but the point is that it's really good, but still very sad. I like that :) It's a nice transition out of the whole happy time on the roadtrip
Though I can't believe Jonah tried to kill the fish AGAIN!
Um, so, yeah, anyway, update soon?
| Isa B chapter 16 . 8/12/2009
You know what I just thought of? If Jonah is afraid of goldfish... why does he work at an aquarium?
Anyways, I'm so happy you're cranking out the chapters once again. I know school is starting and crap like that, but my story alert folder in my inbox has been empty. For like two weeks. I feel so alone. And bored.
As for songs... something by ABBA would be fun. You can't not feel good listening to them. Besides, Super Trouper would be great for getting arrested... it's just really carefree.
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO TELL US WHY OR HOW SHE IS DYING!
It's killing me! (pun not initially intended, then I looked at what I wrote and said, oh what the hey)
| AmandaHold chapter 16 . 8/12/2009
I think Chasing Cars is the perfect song for this chapter. I enjoyed reading this chapter. It really gives you an idea of what is going on inside Becka's head.
| LorriBetha chapter 16 . 8/12/2009
A very sweet, sad chapter. I wanted to cry a lot in this story, but I think it was also because I've just read one sad chapter of another story, and then moved onto yet another sad one, but I wouldn't change it for the world! I still love Bernie and Jonah, I want two best guy friends like that - mine all just pick on me P Hope you'll UPDATE again soon, and stop making me wanna cry!
| HoneyAppleEater chapter 16 . 8/12/2009
Chasing Cars is a pretty perfect song for this chapter, so good choice.
And about rewriting this chapter, I dont think u should, we all need some inner turmoil at some point.
Good idea for the competion for a theme song. now i have to go find one...
Plz update soon!
| ShineLikeAStar chapter 16 . 8/11/2009
Wow, I'm really, really glad that I found this story. It's way amazing, and I am really hoping that maybe she'll somehow NOT die in the end. But I can tell this is going to be a truly amazing story and it's going to have a HUGE impact on people. Your writing style is wonderful BTW. I love it. Update soon, please!
| pat-the-tap chapter 16 . 8/11/2009
YAY! You actually are interested in what I suggested.
Well for this chappie the song (from the ones listed below) that would be good for this chapter is(one of these)-
~Eleanor Rigby- The Beatles
~New Soul- Yael Naim
~The Show- Lenka
For the story's theme song(or other chapters!), some songs that i thought would sound good for this story (these are just suggestions, I'm perfectly fine if you don't choose any of these)-
~I Will Follow You Into the Dark- Death Cab
~Don't Worry Be Happy- Bobby McFerrin
~Dream- Priscilla Ahn
~1, 2, 3, 4- Plain White T's
~Ain't no Mountain High Enough- Marvin Gaye & Tammi Terrell
~Hey love- Jason Mraz
~Lille- Lisa Hannigan
~Passing By- Yiruma
(I know that was a lot of songs i just gave, but I was
excited! You can find all of these songs on Youtube.
I think the song chasing cars can work for the chapter too)
OH and I liked the chapter especially the introduction of the chapter, you really can hear someone talking when you read that part.
| Sucker for a broken promise chapter 16 . 8/11/2009
Ok, again amazing. This is by far my favourite story.
I'm in love with Jonah, I am in love with a fictional character, it's Just Listen all over again :)
It was good to actually hear what Becka was feeling instead of what she was pretending to feel.
Great, please never give this story up!
| whisper-sweet-nothings chapter 16 . 8/11/2009
he, welcome back :) it was a good chapter, no wait, it IS a goodchapter, Jonah's fear of goldfish should not go as far as killing the zombie fish! but it was funny. The rest of the chapter was a little sad, but it all added up to chapter 15 lol. I think I'll wait till the end to submit to the theme song contest. Though I think I have a good song, I'm not telling! :) Update soon!
| Aderyn Azula chapter 16 . 8/11/2009
this chapter and the whole story is AMAZING! i love it! so u need to write more asap! ok? i need to find out whats wrong with becka!
| Jaden Ink chapter 16 . 8/11/2009
Dramatic ending... i wishs she was a balloon too... :(