|Reviews for Liar|
| thinking.about.thinking chapter 1 . 12/15/2009
Sad, but beautiful. Well done.
| andsherose chapter 1 . 12/14/2009
God, that last line is powerful!
For the sake of rhythm, maybe split it, i.e.,
I cannot see you
For lightning or thunder.
I was also thrown off by the 'only' in the second line. It seems sloppy/forced. As a suggestion, maybe try:
But full of lies
Or something like that.
I am quickly becoming a fan of your work, dear. I love them! I hope my reviews help. _
| Existential Therapy chapter 1 . 7/4/2009
You know I don't really go for poetry most of the time, but this was really good. Short sweet and too the point, like I like it lol. "...Let go of my sight and see another." That was definately my favorite line, though it was all awsome. It reminds me of a song I heard once. Its called True Romance by Silverstein. If you've never heard it before, it has to do with what your poem was about xD