He was my best friend before any other thing. Then feelings arose and with it the need to keep up our charades came up...
He was afterall the typical jock and me- I was the average girl you see everywhere...
Xx
S.d.

you should write more, seriously.

Do I believe in love at first sight?

... no. but i believe in lust at first sight. love? not really.

No. At this point in my life, I barely believe in love anymore. But that's just me. Good luck to you.
You are a good writer; I have read a few of your other pieces and they were skillfully rendered. Your use of language is very pretty; however, the first two paragraphs in this piece seem almost unnecessary, and make your story somewhat cliched in trying to admit and break free of said cliche. Do you need them to bring across your point? I think the rest of the piece is more powerful without them. The paragraph about fairy tales is quite exquisite in my opinion.
Good luck in your writing career, and look forward to reading more of your work!
-OctoMethuselah

I believe in love at first sight, though I think it's a rare type of love.

The outline of this piece is absolutely flawless. It flows so evenly, so wonderfully, and many young people – especially teenagers – can relate. I just...I adore it.

Love it!

I do not believe in love at first sight.

Adoring the non-cliche :)

One sentence I don't quite understand: "The girl hates when he's cocky and fronts." What does fronts mean?

Hope you continue this.

-SheepishlyMe

If we missed the live stream, could you do a summary of it? I really wanted to know but I couldn't make it D: I'm really interested in the story (it made me cry like 10 times) and I just wanna know everything you explained in the video so yeeeeah hi pls summary bye

I don't believe in true love. You have to see someone at their worst before you can love them. Not sure what you meant by "a piece of your works", but whatever. My story is actually kind of like what your character described, except more cliche.

As for your story, wow. Yeah, it deserves those 790 reviews. This is the first chapter and it already has me hooked. Congrats :D
Honestly, there is nothing I can say as for corrections. Thank heavens you use the correct punctuation and all of that. Your writing is so lyrical, and lovely. It's amazing.

i don't believe in "love" at first sight
i think that in passing, one could see/admire a person who stood out - whether it was their looks or personality - and continue to see them until it becomes love, but i don't think there is such a thing as "love" at first sight (although i would like for there to be)
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but excellent writing,, my friend recommended your story "to the boy with artist's hands" to me and i absolutely loved it (which is why i'm reading this story right now xD)

Wow, I really liked what you wrote! It felt too short, though. Regardless, this story makes me think about my run-in and my need to "have a story". Thumbs up!

First things first. That was true fully amazing. I mean it, completely and utterly. So well written, with all it's metaphors etc etc.

Second thing, plz plz plz just write the next chappie!

Third thing and a favour, don't make this a complete cliché, plz don't malke it be easy and simple for them. I'd suggest that she falls for someone else and makes herself think that he's the one when he's not, and meanwhile the other guy, the original one, gets jealous and doesn't tell her but makes himself think that it wasn't meant to be. Make it like this wonderful start.

Fourth thing. No, I don't believe in love at first sight because it's too naive to cliché too fairy tale...but in a way I guess I want it to be possible because who doesn't want fairy tales to come true? and yet again I don't wish it because, well because it's not exciting enough. I'd love to put on a piece of my work but I haven't got anything that will fit the order!

Thanks
Fizzy x

there is no next chapter. you've gotten more reviews than words- and for good reason.

do i believe in love at first sight?
no. i believe in *lust* at first sight, and infatuation, but not love. loving someone is seeing their faults and staying with them at their worst and knowing their quirks and breaking their barrier and them doing the same to you. it's not something that can be defined within, quite literally, seconds upon meeting (or... not. if the actual sighting is implied here).
i have no work, nor a suggestion. so, yeah.

Omg I just went back to reread this because I love it and I adore the way you write AND IT'S GONE! WHERE IS IT? Please please PLEASE put it back up.

your true life story was cool.i hope he will finally realize that you two are meant for each other...wish you luck