Reviews for Maybe
RhythmOfLove chapter 14 . 2/13/2010
Hmm...dunno where I'd like to go. So many places to choose from...

Either...England, Italy, or...umm...crap, I can't remember the last one... ALASKA! There we go.

But, my mum's been around the world twice, so, I want to do what she's done.
Scared Loveless chapter 22 . 2/13/2010
So glad you're back! I've missed you. This chapter was great. I think I'm starting to fall in love with Bryant myself. Hope to here more soon!

George
RhythmOfLove chapter 13 . 2/13/2010
Love...

I'd say you hit the nail on the head at the end of the chapter.

I have no idea what love is. Does anyone? It's completely indescribable...
RhythmOfLove chapter 12 . 2/13/2010
Have I ever taken the initiative Erica did? ...I guess I have once. It worked out well for a little while, but, slowly, the boy was starting to destroy me...

And Valentines day...it's been two years since I've celebrated it with anyone special...so, I don't love it, but, I don't think I hate it either... I just have yet to find the right person...
RhythmOfLove chapter 11 . 2/13/2010
Yes, you can like someone you don't know. For instance, I talk to this boy in California, and, yes, I like him...he likes me back, and we know a lot about each other...but...it's not the same as talking to someone in person...

As for having experienced what's happened in this chapter, if you mean the heartbreak, then yes. Yes, I have, when I was young...and on many occasions.
RhythmOfLove chapter 10 . 2/13/2010
Confident... I'm getting there. I used to just hide in my own little bubble. I still sort of do. I don't pay much attention to my surroundings. I just go about my own business...but, I'm getting there...a little more social, a little more willing to try new things...
RhythmOfLove chapter 9 . 2/13/2010
Favourite part of Christmas...umm...not sure. The relaxing, or the family bit... Presents... I'm 16 now, so, it's harder to choose presents for me, especially when I don't know what I want... I think it's the relaxing bit, because, my family isn't always the highlight of the day...
RhythmOfLove chapter 8 . 2/13/2010
All-time favourite Halloween costume is difficult to answer for me... I've never been trick-or-treating before in my life. My mum doesn't like it...

But, if I had to choose...possibly a werewolf, the grim reaper, or...a bloody maid...or a fallen angel... But, yeah, I don't know how I'd do them. Never really celebrated Halloween before...
A Star In Her Eye chapter 22 . 2/13/2010
Aw, I really liked this chapter. It was so good. I like the conversations between Ella and Bryant.
RhythmOfLove chapter 6 . 2/13/2010
How do you know when you like someone...?

Well...you don't really. Sometimes it's staring you right in the face, but you don't see it...like a needle in a haystack... Other times it slaps you around the head like a wet fish...

It's very similar to loathing, with a fine line against lust. But, you never really know...

Your heart doesn't settle down, you feel as if you can't breathe. Your stomach feels as if it's doing back flips, almost as if coaxing you to throw up or pass out... Your face is hot with blood whenever someone talks about them, whenever you talk about them, or whenever you even pass them in the hallway, with a brush of the arm, or whenever your eyes meet...

It's unpredictable, unreasonable, unbearable...and sometimes it destroys you completely... But it's always there... You don't really know until you look in the right place... Sometimes you don't even know until they've completely slipped from your grasp...
RhythmOfLove chapter 4 . 2/13/2010
3) Most daring thing I've ever done? Hmm...probably tell a boy, to his face, that I like him, even though he already had a girlfriend. Of course I got rejected at the time, but, he and that girlfriend ended about 6 months after I told him... Then he was confessing that he liked me, so...I dunno, I'm confused...sorta a Happily Ever After, but, I don't really believe in that stuff... I'm a little like your main character, I guess...
RhythmOfLove chapter 3 . 2/13/2010
2) Hmm...I dunno, really. Sometimes I tell them, sometimes I prefer to keep it to myself, depends on the situation...
RhythmOfLove chapter 2 . 2/13/2010
The story's good, but, I'm just going to go through and answer your questions...

1) Yes, it is better to have loved and lost then to have never laved at all. It may cause heartbreak, but, it's an experience. You learn from your mistakes, in a way...
x Storm x chapter 22 . 2/13/2010
Nice chapter, once again. Bryant and Ella are getting to know each other and, after such a long time of not talking, I can't say it's bad that you're building their "relationship" for a few chapters. I love the fact that she's acting as if she were insulted by the fact that he wants to see her face, she basically tells him he's superficial... yet it's only a way to hide how scared she is of disappointing him (I mean, it's kind of obvious she's scared, or else she wouldn't be hiding her identity and talking to him only on msn... yet I can relate to what he's saying. A face is part of someone, it reflects their emotions, their thoughts... it tells a lot).

By the way, in the second chat, I think there's a problem around "Bryant: not spending enough time with my sister. you?why. hours away by plane.", I think you should have a space or something... And, you know... she's sneaky. I like that. Getting him to talk about himself, yet always leaving when HE wants to know more. It is rather unfair, though. It's sweet that after she's talked with Bryant about siblings, she comforts him (it's very "à propos" like we say in French... can't find the equivalent in Eng, sorry)

I love your run-on sentences. I know most teachers would say to avoid them at all cost (mine do), but I love them. I love that they flow together so nicely, they give a sense of urgency, of confusion to the character. Coupled with the fear or growing up, it's quite perfect. And I'm fond of this shyness, mixed with a teenage kind of flirting when Bryant and Ella flirt. I think any normal teenager went through this phase where the opposite sex was mysterious, yet appealing... and it makes for strange, awkward or random conversations (about what she likes in a guy, weather, then religion - anything at all, just to talk with each other, y'know?). And the complexity of wanting "the" guy... full of contradictions (teen girls sure are/were picky).

Um, in the last part... are we supposed to not know who Bryant is arguing with? Because I'm lost, there. That's mostly the only thing that bugs me.

About the structure of the chapter, now. It's all over the place, in a way (a mix of chat speak, dialogue, thoughts and writing), but it flows. It's just the way this story's written, and when the reader actually understands that, when he/she gets sucked into Ella's thoughts, it works. However - and maybe it's just me being difficult here, but I think it sometimes feels like there aren't enough description. I like your style, it's original and it works with your story, but... my more "conservative" side I guess feels like it's a very introverted story and I'd sometimes like to see more description about the surroundings, the characters (I know, appearances aren't really important to Ella - or she don't want them to be - but I'm a visual person, sadly).

Anyway, this is only a suggestion. Your style is still original, and I still like it, and I'll still read it, obviously. I wish you the best of luck in the future!

PS: Sorry for this awfully long review. I can't seem to stop myself from rambling, it's a bad habit.
A Star In Her Eye chapter 14 . 2/13/2010
I loved how she didn't get the whole joke with Seth. I actually didn't get it at first. Then I reread it and was like, oh. Ew. :D

Question: Is there any place you would love to go?

I'd love to go to New York City. I've been there a million times and never get sick of it. It's beautiful and I don't know, I just find it kind of magical, too. I love all the people and the energy and how much happens there.
799 | « Prev Page 1 .. 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 20 .. Last Next »