I've only read the first segment and I just had to review. Your writing is insanely relatable. I can swear to you that I have had all these exact same thought and conversations. I'm so jealous that you can put these words because I always mean but always forget.

I'm sure it will be another fabulous chapter

Answer: I wouldn't know I've never like-liked someone before really, or just never noticed it. But I think it's when you can be yourself around them and they can be themselves around you. And you trust them.

Love the Peter Pan reference at the end. Another great chapter.

Wow, really great story. Completely relatable I know that conversation is almost exactly like some me and my friends have. I love how realistic the characters and how they act their own age. It's hard to find a story about teenagers like that.

To answer the first question, I believe in attraction at first sight and love comes a bit later.

Second question, it is definitaly better to have loved and lost.

Thankyou so much

P.S Is this a true story?

i can't really put into words how this story makes me feel (im bad with talking about "feelings" lol) but it's definitely a good feeling

- Ellie

please update!

this is so good :)

WHY DID YOU STOP seriously this is probably the BEST story on FP right now. It's realistic and emotional and realistic and raw and realistic and phenomenal and REALISTIC AND JESUS CHRIST IT'S REALISTIC. I am sosososo tired and frustrated by all the stories on here that try SO HARD to mimic the popular FP classics. It. Is. Damn. Annoying.

But you-you are...my hero. Literally. You saved me from suffocating myself with my own pillow when you wrote this and posted it here. I LOVE YOU (strictly platonic I swear) I LOVE YOU TO THE ENDS OF THIS EARTH D': (not selling ya? yeah I would be suspicious too)

There's nothing more I can say...i can't even criticize your story like I normally do when I review...besides...i guess maybe outlining it in a more organized fashion BUT NOW I FEEL LIKE LIGHTING MYSELF ON FIRE

Please please please please please please please PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE...Please update soon. I will go insane if you don't. I will. I really will...ok...I'm going to go crawl in a ditch somewhere and muse over how sad my life has become...until you update...soon

I love this. All the thoughts that the character had are so real to me and I can really relate to her. The part where she broke down in class really got to me. You have put so many of my once indescribable thoughts into words. Especially the thing about everyone else growing up and you being left behind. No one could have said it better.

Bravo, really.

Hi! So I just read this story and I have a couple of things to say. First, I like the way everything is kind of disjointed and the whole thing is kind of just a bundle of snippets, and I like Bryant, too, he's different. But, I think you need to have a little more faith and stop justifying everything in the author's notes! I don't mean that to sound mean - I just mean that a lot of times, we don't need the extra explanation and you shouldn't necessarily have to say things like 'sorry he sounds like a girl' or 'I wanted to show them getting to know each other.' As readers, we can probably see that they are getting to know each other (if you've done your job right, which in this case, you have). And it's *your* story - don't apologise if Bryant sounds like a girl!

Sorry if this sounds a little lecture-y. I do really like the story - I was disappointed that it wasn't finished, haha, I hope you update soon!

This review is going to seem, well, really pointless. I know you are going to read it and ask yourself: why would this person even bother? Because, you see, I can not fully review your story because I am not going to read it. However, I wish I could. You see, I have this rule were I don't read unfinished stories. I get too caught up in what's happening and, when I see it's not finished, I feel a sort of longing inside me. This happens specially when the story is good, like I can tell yours is just by the introduction. I know that I am going to read and read, probably stay up all night (it's pretty late) and then I am going to feel cranky and moody because I want to know how it ends. It'll be like reading an amazing book and then finding out the letters in the last page were erased by time, blown away by the wind. Like being in the middle of eating a delicious dessert and having your little brother steal the last piece.

I am not asking you to finish it and finish it now, because good work takes time. I wrote this to tell you that I am looking forward like you wouldn't believe for the story to be finished, so I can drown in it. Because, honestly, I know it'll be one of those stories that you don't just read, it will be one of those stories in which you drown in the words. The prologue is genius (because she's scared that maybe he had seen her eccentricity glowing neon through her bones- that maybe he'd glimpsed the geography of her veins, drenched in vermillion and lithium-sweet gasoline- that maybe, maybe he'd seen her heart jolt.)and the way you play with words (freeze, frees, free her) is amazing.

Ok, I confess I read a bit of the first chapter, until I got to the part were she meets his eyes. I stopped. If I go on, I won't be able to stop. I really don't want any self-harm here. That bit was, well, no words for it, specially when she says she hadn't noticed his eyes were brown.

I'll stop rambling now, and go on and look for something else to entertain me. In a while, I will come back to your story and, hopefully, find a really great surprise.

Early congratulations.

"We had chemistry," I finally say. The sentence comes out almost like a question.

"Have," Bryant says.

"Had," I say softly, and walk away like it was only grammar.

this bit was absolutely stunning. i love this story so farrr (and i should be revising)! xxxxxxxx

This is just so...raw. Pure raw emotion exudes every word that fills the screen. Stop apologzing. You're a really great writer. Doubt comes with everything one tries to do and you shouldn't apologize for something you like to do. There's some parts that seem random but it's not that often and it fits the story. It fits the way your main character thinks and goes through life. It fits the way everyone goes through life thinking sporadically about everything and nothing. You made me cry when there was a scene with the aunt with cancer. You got those emotions perfectly. I really like your style. And I find your use of imagery extraordinary.

On to the characters. I really like Ella. Her perspective is something I relate to so easily and she reminds me of a friend of mine who loves to write more than breathing. I love Bryant. He seems like a cool guy and I don't mind bryant filled chapters. Sometimes the I'M conversations are the only things that are needed. I'm not a fan of s..oh shoot the girl with the college guy. It's one of those you're my real friend but this girl jess is going to be my real fake new best friend...really hate those situations. I feel so bad for the friend who likes her and she's not interested. Erica is really her only close girl friend right now. Nicole I hope doesn't do something stupid and go anorexic for dancing. I didn't get them all but I mostly wanted to get the main ones but I got ahead of myself...

Anyway

Update soon! I love your story

Crimson

I think what I like the most is the fact that you make it as real as possible, they don't fall in love immediately and there's not like a big event that changes their lives. And also it's different, I like the way you don't just say oh and he liked her, you actually explain it and make it beautiful :)

and...I love the fact that you throw some spanish on it, if you ever need help with that I'll be really happy, I think there was just one error when she was talking to Seth and he says 'nada mucho' it should said 'no mucho', oh and just in case you need it : ñ Ñ ;)

please update soon!

So I just started reading this story, and I was immediately drawn into your unbelievable writing. It was filled with imagery, similies, and all those beautiful literary elements without taking away from the story, and it was integrated seamlessly into the first part. I really enjoyed the twist when we found out she was the writer. I usually finish all the avaliable chapters and comment at the very end, but I really just couldn't hold back at this! Going on to read the rest 3

-xox