Reviews for Splitting the Second
Isca chapter 1 . 7/2/2009
"I need change." Whoa! The tone of this line is perfect. The beginning of the poem is manic, rushed, and frenzied, but this little line immediately allows the reader to catch a glimpse of the speaker's true nature. This poem, in its words and form, is kind of insane (and I mean that in a good way). It's this insanity that makes the angst so much more profound. Keep up the good work. :)
Pathway chapter 1 . 6/28/2009
fantastically frenetic, great descriptions (cocktail-glass-antiheroes). Love it.
fictionalboyfriend chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
Whew. This poem is a little bit exhausting. You weren't lying about 'manic'.
rage of aquarius chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
My favorite lines:

c)loud, a crow(d)

star shaped hearts. heart

shaped stars; stare shaped scars

plastic handmedownsdowndowndown

I also think that "lowercase confessions to/childhood friends" is clever, and your manipulation of punctuation is amazing. The "inhale" ... "exhale" thing is breathtaking, too (no pun intended). I'm all admiration. This should be published.