|Reviews for spark|
| PoetryMagic12 chapter 1 . 11/2/2014
Seems the lines are a bit short, with one word, but that is my opinion. I may have done it with one of my poems. I don't remember. Anyway don't take it personally. I do enjoy this poem. Keep it up like always.
| Lolitroy chapter 1 . 12/25/2012
:) I always love your poems very much :D your style is just so unique! And my favorite verse was the last one :D
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 2/22/2010
Wow, you use some vivid and heavy words to hash out this character, andi think it works well. So does all of the breathing imagery.
around your fingertips" - that line is amazing and was my favourite. :)
| Kalista Jia chapter 1 . 2/22/2010
There are some really cool phrases in there! Love!
I like how you add these little actions, such asl "click.", "Up.", "inhale", "impluse" ...etc. I find it really intriguing. _
"test the limits of senses." love! (especially I am studying "Stuff of Nonsense" in one of my classes... O.o I know lol)
around your fingertips"
(really cool imagery. I can picture the scene well... nya!)
The theme of connection/disconnection in this piece is wonderfully portrayed. _
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 11/18/2009
I rarely love such short lines and sentences but here I feel the disconnection really works in your favor. It's an interesting collection of abstractions and clear direction that rarely evens out but again, here I'm loving it.
Reminds me quite a bit of how I'm living my life at the moment - doing things and thinking things but never feeling like there's anything of worth at the end.
The "mornings. trapped in your head with so much smoke." is particularly poignant.
| celestial tears chapter 1 . 7/4/2009
Oh boy, another one. Obssessive person checking e-mails/ text messages and someone with a ligther who ends up burning their fingers. God, I suck at this but that is all I have. Character sketch, really? The psyche of this person seems neat or maybe it is just your mind that is interesting, has to be to write the things that you do.
I liked this one too.
| Isca chapter 1 . 7/2/2009
"Don't forget to breathe." I love that the speaker disconnects from the world and almost forgets to function. There's something so wonderfully nouveau about this poem. The line, "dreams echo," was particularly beautiful. :)
| fictionalboyfriend chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
"spark" is a really good title for this piece.
| rage of aquarius chapter 1 . 6/27/2009
Postmodernity, again! "trapped in your/head with so much/smoke." This entire thing is brilliant; I can feel that line acutely.