Lovely piece. I get the feeling that the narrative persona has half of her mind on other things. Vivid images! :)

Loved the imagery in this. It seemed so subtle yet it basically bled through your words at the same time. Also, I loved the fact that you wrote this in first person. It gave it a really personal feel. Nicely done.

- Dee, from the Review Marathon.

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I think it's interesting that 'red bricks' would 'uphold' the speaker-as if pain would keep her going. This piece is very original and abstract. :)

More abstract then I’m used to seeing from you. There’s a discourse within it about painting bricks, which in itself is slightly ironic, being that bricks are ‘bricks’ because they already look a certain way.

You then go on to discus the beauty of the body, and forgetting - either beauty, or transfiguring one object/aspect to another. It’s very interesting, it made me think. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

very good. It is well constructed although it sort of leaves me in midair.. but then completing a poem is often the work of the reader. Reviewing poetry is difficult since the same words can have quite different meaning to different reader. This one leaves a lot to the imagination but that might be a good thing. don