So cute! I love this story! :D :D

I really liked the story :) It was really cute.

The part where she says she is distracted by the butterflies is hilarious :D

Anyway, keep writing, your story was fun to read :)

Hey, Im French and I was going to correct you but I see SmilingButterfly96 already took care of it

Ah, maybe just that we have a distinction between "I love you" and "Im in love with you" too

It's(respectively): "je t'aime" and "je suis amoureux de toi"(for a man)/ "je suis amoureuse de toi"(for a woman)

Cute story :)

tres bien! i loved this story soooooooooooo much:3

Aww. That was so adorable.

When I first read your description of the story I honestly thought Evelyn knew French and said Je suis dans l'amour avec toi instead of Je te deteste because she was secretly in love with him or something, so I absolutely loved how you made Rose lie to her.

I love their fight in the beginning-that was really cute and you can see that under the hatred, there is some love.

One thing that sorta bugged me though, was how quickly the fell in love. That said, I loved the actual falling in love. The dialogue was so realistic and could have been a part of everyday conversation, something that I think is missing from loads of stories.

Jay's last name is awesome. Is that a real name, Rotsford?

Keep up the great work.

Such another great story from you! Well done!

Cute! That brought a smile to my face.

As I'm sure someone else has pointed out already, your French is a little off, so for someone who has taken French since 3rd grade, it's unbelievable, but for the sake of the story, I'll let it slide.

-OA

loved it.

Aw! Cute:). But the i just have to point out some mistakes in the French translations. C'est 'je t'aime aussi'. Pas 'je suis amour avec toi'. Amour is the noun 'love'. Aimer or adorer is the verb 'to love'. Then you have to conjugate and everything. And for 'm'embrasser' it would probably be 'embrasse-moi'. Use te imperative for

rather than the infinitive form. Also for 'je vous déteste' use 'je te déteste'. No need for the respectful or plural version of you. Sorry about that. I am a 94% student in extended French and have taken French since grade 1 so the tiniest mistakes I see need to be corrected:). Other than that it was a very enjoyable story:).

Aw, so sweet and perfect! I loved it, well done!

Estoy enamorado de ti. Spanish.

But other than that you go dude awesome story )

I ENJOYED THIS STORY VERY MUCH.

Y DID YOU NOT MAKE A COUPLE OF CHAPTERS.

WAS REALLY GOOD.

Hey, Amy! I like your story. It's sweet, short and nice. Though there are a few problems with the French. I assumed you used the google translator because I asked myself where did you get those confusing French sentences.

'Je vous déteste', is right.

'Je suis amour vous aussi', just makes no sense. It's random and confusing words. The thing with the google translator is that it IT ONLY translates the correct words, and it doesn't even check if the sentence makes sense. They check if the words are right...

The proper way is, 'Je t'aime aussi'.

'Je suis dans l'amour avec toi', it makes sense but then again, there's a better and proper way. It's, Je t'aime. That means, 'I love you.'

Lastly, 'M'embrasser'. I'm not an expert on this word, I don't know how to say 'kiss me' in French. But I do know, 'Embrasser' means hug. If I were to say, 'kiss me' in French I would have said, donne moi un bisou. Which means, 'give me a kiss'

Have a nice day :)

Haha. I liked this one. :)

aw..so cute..