|Reviews for Make Up's and Break Up's|
| readingandwritingfreak chapter 3 . 8/19/2009
UGh I have writer's block too! It's MASSIVE!
| HikariHwaiting chapter 3 . 8/19/2009
I'm not the type to get jealous but i'm pretty jealous. great chapter, you're getting more reviews than I am...probably because my stuff isnt K or K...well none of the new stuff i put up. BUT ENOUGH ABOUT ME BEFORE I GET HATE MAIL FROM YOUR FANS.
Seriously I have noticed your skills are improving, and i cannot WAIT to see where this story will go.
| VampireAcademyDB chapter 3 . 8/18/2009
Really good story Update Soon! :)
| babyk2278 chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
Good start you got going here. What you need to do is work on describing. Its very vague. Other than that its great! Hope to see an update:)
| breakinglove chapter 2 . 7/24/2009
I'm going to give you some constructive crit, because that's the best type of review. :D
1. Don't but everything in bold. It hurts my eyes.
2. I think you should get a beta, because there are a few mistakes that could easily be solved. I get this all the time.
3. DESCRIBE. I want to know what Chelsie looks like, what the place she is in is like.
4. Don't post lyrics because it's against fp rules, or post a disclaimer with some details of who owns the song.
5. Hannah. Yep, she got her own point. Explain her motives, or she'l end up a 1-d character. theres an article toughanddirty. so - /articles. html
That goes in depths about how important your characters are. I want to relate to your characters.
6. Same goes for all your characters.
Just keep these in mind when you write your next chapter. I love the title of your character, I would like to see where this story is going. I love your title, maybe improve your summary to get more reviews. Good Job!
| readingandwritingfreak chapter 2 . 7/11/2009
o! wonder whatll happen?
| HikariHwaiting chapter 2 . 7/10/2009
| readingandwritingfreak chapter 1 . 7/1/2009
I like your... first chapter or prologue or whatever. But it's good!
| technogemini chapter 1 . 7/1/2009
i wanna read more! - its alittle short for me to give a proper review
| Jexa chapter 1 . 7/1/2009
I am likeing beginning of this, can't wait to see where this goes.