UGh I have writer's block too! It's MASSIVE!

I'm not the type to get jealous but i'm pretty jealous. great chapter, you're getting more reviews than I am...probably because my stuff isnt K or K...well none of the new stuff i put up. BUT ENOUGH ABOUT ME BEFORE I GET HATE MAIL FROM YOUR FANS.

Seriously I have noticed your skills are improving, and i cannot WAIT to see where this story will go.

Really good story Update Soon! :)

Good start you got going here. What you need to do is work on describing. Its very vague. Other than that its great! Hope to see an update:)

babyk2278

I'm going to give you some constructive crit, because that's the best type of review. :D

1. Don't but everything in bold. It hurts my eyes.

2. I think you should get a beta, because there are a few mistakes that could easily be solved. I get this all the time.

3. DESCRIBE. I want to know what Chelsie looks like, what the place she is in is like.

4. Don't post lyrics because it's against fp rules, or post a disclaimer with some details of who owns the song.

5. Hannah. Yep, she got her own point. Explain her motives, or she'l end up a 1-d character. theres an article toughanddirty. so - /articles. html

That goes in depths about how important your characters are. I want to relate to your characters.

6. Same goes for all your characters.

Just keep these in mind when you write your next chapter. I love the title of your character, I would like to see where this story is going. I love your title, maybe improve your summary to get more reviews. Good Job!

Eve

o! wonder whatll happen?

great job!

I like your... first chapter or prologue or whatever. But it's good!

i wanna read more! - its alittle short for me to give a proper review

I am likeing beginning of this, can't wait to see where this goes.