Reviews for trainwrecks aren't always tragedies
tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 7/5/2009
i really liked the simplistic nature that you created with this poem, however i do believe that some more description of the girl and how she feels could do this poem some justice

but i really enjoyed reading it.

i would love opinions from an author like you on some of my work here on fictionpress! honest opinions/feedback would mean the world to me!
tangerine dreamer chapter 1 . 7/5/2009
i like the feeling i get from this girl. seems like she's in a rut (maybe an addiction) that she can't get out of, people label her and that only makes it harder for her to move forward.

i also like that it's short and simplistic. if you had drawn it out, that might have seemed too angsty. it has a hopeful feeling that i like that makes me feel like this isn't a dead end road for her.

i do think however, you could've described her a little bit more, maybe hinted at exactly why she's a trainwreck because i'm not sure i feel it. just because she smokes cigarettes doesn't quite make her a mess.

overall, nicely done! keep writing!