|Reviews for Broken|
| Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 7/27/2009
This was very good!
It is short and to the point but has a lot of emotion behind it.
I like these lines,
"You have to pull apart the shards
Of the blackened soul inside her
And her hopeless broken heart."
And the last two as well, a great ending.
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 7/24/2009
Wonderful! Rhyming and sentiment both touching. :)
| S. M. Saves chapter 1 . 7/24/2009
That guy needs a swift kick in the pants. :D
I like how this piece reflects the emotions that (I'm sure) were felt duing the time it was written.
| Rockin-Ferrett chapter 1 . 7/18/2009
like the short and sweet idea. makes the poem more real because u didnt ramble on forever.
| dancin-in-the-rain chapter 1 . 7/10/2009
This was packed with emotion and I could understand what was happening even with so few words.
That takes skills.
I get how her sould could be blackened; she has now lost faith in love or has become bitter. Tragic.
I love your writing! -
Hope to see more soon!
| letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 7/10/2009
So emotive! And definitely to the point. What a horrid guy.
| Venz0r chapter 1 . 7/9/2009
Aw, I didn't think someone broken would have a black soul especially if she wasn't the one at fault.
I think you should try to find another title, despite feeling unable to come up with an original one. It's hard when the piece is short, but I'm sure there's something meaningful you can drag out of it.
I like how it's for someone else. Dedicating poetry is the best. I hope this helps them out.