Reviews for The Differences Between You And Me
Alice Novak chapter 11 . 8/15/2009
Heya! Cool Story!

I can really see your writing improve over the chapters!

Great job~ XD

x. alyona . iva
RYTwinDemon chapter 10 . 8/10/2009
You're writing's MUCH improved in this chapter. Though I am a bit peeved on one thing. I'm not against fast-moving relationships, but I think that their feelings for each other should escalate through their meetings, it'll seem all the more real that way. I hope you don't take this offensively, I think you've got LOTS of potential as a writer, and I hope you continue to improve. Nyahahaha, listen to me ramble! I'm not that good myself, but I hope you take this into consideration! I love your story! Update soon, 'kay? :-D
RYTwinDemon chapter 9 . 8/10/2009
Por Ever. D-: I can't seem to stop saying that. But ! certainly hope her situation gets better!
RYTwinDemon chapter 8 . 8/10/2009
Hmm, who's this new character, I wonder? :-D By the way, when you say 'third person POV', it denotes that you're writing style changes from first person, which is the character narrating the story, to the third person, which is you, the author, narrating it. I sorta got confused there, haha. I think it would be best if you wrote something like, 'Other POV' to keep the mystery and to denote a change in character perspective. Just a bit of friendly advice! Other than that, I love Ever, and your story. Keep it up!
RYTwinDemon chapter 7 . 8/10/2009
I like the idea of her eyes changing color whenever she goes up in flames. Another tidbit of advice, though? When you're going into stuff like dreams or flashbacks, it's best to separate them by either italicizing the words, making them bold, putting horizontal lines in, or other stuff like that. Know what I mean? Other than that, the chapter was good! :-D
RYTwinDemon chapter 6 . 8/9/2009
I couldn't help but laugh when Ever began to swear over and over again... and when she was admiring Trevor's looks, hahahaha. XD
RYTwinDemon chapter 5 . 8/9/2009
Taylor sounds cute. :-D
RYTwinDemon chapter 4 . 8/9/2009
D-: I can never get tires of saying this. Poor Ever...

By the way, is John her father-in-law, or her foster father? Because if he were her father-in-law, then she'd have to be married... O.O
RYTwinDemon chapter 3 . 8/9/2009
*sighs* I'd be like that too if my mum died. Poor Ever. You might want to add more descriptions though, such as how Ever looks like. Her hair, her eyes, stuff like that. I can understand where Ever's coming from... though I do love her powers.
RYTwinDemon chapter 2 . 8/9/2009
Oh my. Poor Ever. I love, love, love her name by the way, it just sounds so etherial. :-D May I give some suggestions, though? I think it would be better to refrain from making too many words capitalized, because it gets too dramatic at times. You'll have the same effect with italicized words. :-D And don't forget to put periods at the end of your dialogue! Re-check for misspelled words, such as 'fare'. I think you meant 'fair'? Asides from that, it was a great chapter! I can't wait to see where you're taking this! :-D
RYTwinDemon chapter 1 . 8/9/2009
You've got an interesting concept going here. :-D I like that whenever the flames touch her, she isn't burned, and has the opposite effect. It's very intriguing. :-D
ColonialTimesGirl chapter 1 . 7/9/2009
So far, its good.