I heard about this story from the Roadhouse and I'm so sad to see that it's been almost a year since you updated this! ): This story is very entertaining to read! I just wish there were more):

-arandomwriter

Hot chapter! Haha, is he giving her inspiration for her yaoi mang lol.

Haha the interactions between Toby and Izumi was great! And now Im interested in the mother...

Ahaha Izumi is so funny! Cant wait to read more about the couple! Btw, MC stands for main character lol, I use it a lot, sorry...

Can't wait for scenes where she's drawing manga, that seems really interesting!

Love the chemistry between them! But I find it sad that other men think the MC is stupid...:(

They'd never assume that about me! (I hope anyway lol)

She writes best when she's annoyed! So Izumi and Anda are perfect lol.

Loving this.

AHAHAHA LOVED the end! And a story about manga, well, I'm definitely your reader!

I really liked this character profile. It was very revealing :) And I like your idea of distributing more throughout the story. Nice job. Sorry I don't have anything more to say; it pretty much speaks for itself.

Your story is brilliant. Your grammars spot on. And the story is easy going and nice to read. It's a 10/10 stars :) x Continue... x

Well, me again from the Roadhouse. :) Okay, basically I can see all the ingredients for a romance comedy to take place present here. I believe that you will be gunning for verbal humour rather than the visual type, so guess I'll have to read properly to understand the lols. ;) As for the conversation here, what you did has been pretty good in a sense that the whole thing has given the reader a good idea on what to expect. I'm not too sure about the Orca joke though since I'm not schooled in Japanese. Anyway, it seems that interesting stuff is going to happen soon. :D

P.S: Pay back via The Eternal Grail. :)

-From the Roadhouse

hehe. I just love these two.

Herro there. From the Roadhouse here. :) Wow, never imagine you're a manga nut here. Me too as well although it's been N ages since I've bought the latest Naruto volume. That's why I'm holed up reading GetBackers lol! I honestly recommend this work from my own opinions albeit there are still some loose ends yet to be tied by the end. Guess it's a yay for the fanfics nuts. ;) Okay, enough about the idle talk. Onto the review. Well, basically, I've got nothing much to criticize here. You did well to set up the potential humour in this chapter and you even input your own brand of humour here as well albeit in a minor way. I never really imagine using the manga industry as the basis for a romance story to be honest. But then again, my experience with romantic works is pretty near nil. Wonder what will happen next. Guess I'll get to see quite a good load of lol scenes in the future. ;)

P.S: Pay back via The Eternal Grail. :)

Great info you added to the end of this chapter. Some of it I knew, some of it I didn't. So, kudos, you taught me something :)

I enjoyed this chapter. Toby was very funny. I enjoyed meeting his character. When Izumi said he'd asked her to marry him. . .that was just hilarious.

I also really enjoyed the end of this chapter because it gave me more insight into the FMC's POV, her upbringing, and what she expects to get out of her life. It was a more serious note that added some reader-sympathy.

Well done!

I see that you're working on revising this, but I thought I'd go ahead and read it anyhow.

My favorite part of this chapter was when he began his quick dream analysis. I laughed out loud at that dialogue. Well done!

Also, I loved the description of the forest at the beginning of the chapter. It was lovely, and it did have a sort of dream quality to it!

She's so emotionally torn at the end of this chapter. Usually that's when I can write my best, though sometimes uncertainty bleeds out into my fiction/poetry.

Great chapter.

Oh, it's great to see them getting comfortable. Great chapter. So she's never seen a man's pierced chest up close and personal? Interesting detail. You're writing their back and forth dialogue very well. I'm glad you had Izumi compliment her cleverness instead of getting an ego over it-I believe there are two kinds of guys (both of which are nice), one who likes a woman with a little snark and one who is offended by cleverness. It's good to see where Izumi falls in. He seems to be able to take the punches. Good characterization throughout.