|Reviews for The Golem's House|
| PyroTech chapter 11 . 5/24/2010
I love this
| mousegirl05 chapter 10 . 10/3/2009
Okay, as long as you wanted these things pointed out, this was one I remembered, but wasn't sure if it was important enough to bother you with (just in case you weren't such a fan of these kinds of critiques-I just couldn't let the other one go. _~ So when "until Allen was wreathing beneath him" I think you might mean writhing. Of course, maybe Allen found a way be producing or hanging those wonderful Christmas traditions while being completely destracted by our wonderful Golem... but I sure couldn't. _~ That was really the only other one that I remember-and of course I read this section again JUST to find it. Ah, the sacrifices one puts in for a review. *laughs* _~ Yay for sweet, sexy sex!
| mousegirl05 chapter 11 . 10/3/2009
Ah, this was a very enjoyable tale altogether. Very satisfying. As you said it was short, which required certain sections to be shorter than one might enjoy. _ I really liked the interactions between Allen and Darcayah, and especially how they both grew throughout the course of the story. It's always more enjoyable when characters grow and develope together instead of one or the other.
The world itself seems fun too. There were parts (like the Cry, the Valkarie, and the discussion of the magics) that hinted at a deep and well-thought-out environment that just tickle and tease in the most pleasing way. _
Speak of the Cry though, I wonder if I missed it, but I'm not very clear on how/who/what saved Allen from being eating by that bloody thing. Was it simply that it wasn't going to jump down the cliff to get him? Oh but the description of how it killed the plant life and dazed Allen with just its voice was AMAZING. I don't think I've encountered a creature like that in my readings, and I liked it very much. I also liked very much how Allen feared for Darcayah immediately when he made the connections. It was so sweet!
Of course their consumation was sweet as well. One of those things that the reader wanted to be a little longer. I guess, it was because they'd spent so much time in dialogue that there felt like there should have been just a little more of it before/during/after. But yeah, not all couples talk in bed! *Laughs* Either way, it was satisfying and well done... OH! and I LOVED the interruptions. Really, Jesse and Bert are idiots. *snickers* Who goes into someone's room without knocking? AND who goes into someone's room without knocking when they KNOW they were 'busy' not five minutes before? *Bawls laughing*
One would probably have enjoyed the fact that Jesse and Bert got together in the end if somehow Bert wasn't such a dick. Maybe a little bit of a hint of remorse at the beginning or some looks of conflictedness. Or maybe the apology coming before the return trip... I don't know. Just thoughts. They way you have it is still good. I liked it after all. _
That's enough of my ranting I suppose. A nice and well-constructed story and world. As others have said before me, I am sure a sequel or continuation would be amazing as well. Cheers!
| mousegirl05 chapter 4 . 10/3/2009
Okay, so I'm really enjoying the story very much. I like the characters and the plot very much. I must admit, I had to laugh a little bit about half-way through this chapter. You used the word "urethral" to describe how Darcayah moves. Uhm... well you see urethral is an adjective that is used to describe things dealing with the urethra-which is part of human anatomy. _ I believe the word you want to use here is "ethereal" which is used to describe something with an unearthly feel or grace. Cheers!
| Rose chapter 11 . 9/23/2009
Aww that was lovely, chararters were well written and interesting and the fantasy world you created well described. I 'd love to read a sequel if you felt like writing one, It would be wonderful to find out what allen and darcayah get up to in Eugar. Thank you for the great story and I'll be eagerly keeping an eye out for anything else you write!
| Purple Above chapter 11 . 9/22/2009
This was an amazing story, I can't believe you only have 18 reviews!
| CrimsonLilly chapter 9 . 9/9/2009
I cheated. I was just so into reading it, that I forgot all about that nifty review button on the bottom of the page. This was such a wonderful story and I can't wait for the last two chapters. It was a sort of fast-paced story, but still it didn't feel like their feelings were just suddenly there. It didn't feel rushed and it felt so simple, the fact that in being with each other they started to love each other. And even though I thought at first that Darcayah would be a little distant, since he said he didn't really know if what he felt was really real, I'm glad to see that they're just going through it day by day. Hope you update soon!
| CrimsonLilly chapter 5 . 9/9/2009
Aw...so cute. That's all I need to say. They are so cute and Allen is being bewitched by our lovely golem muahahahaha Ahem. He's slightly bewitched, too, even if he tries to deny it ;)
| CrimsonLilly chapter 4 . 9/9/2009
Oh, something I forgot to mention about the previous chapter! The magic! It's really unique and quite well explained(that one spell for fixing the sword) and I'd like to know more of it...Seeing how this story is nearly over, I can only hope my curiosity will be satisfied in later chapters. Darcayah-so cute how shocked he was when Allen called him conceited and all that :) Made me laugh how shocked he was at the notion that he acquired some human traits. Allen is so sweet that I can even forgive him his airheadedness. He even insulted Dar when he didn't realise the guy wasn't human. he heh
| CrimsonLilly chapter 3 . 9/9/2009
Darcayah seems like a block of ice. Freezing cold :) His short, clipped answers suit him perfectly. Or at least they suit the image of him in my head. The dialogue between Allen and him is witty and funny, inducing bouts of loud laughter. Especially the part where he asks for a nightshirt, what was it...'You can keep me pantless'? Poor Allen, he was practically desperate when he offered that ;)
| CrimsonLilly chapter 2 . 9/9/2009
Hm...I like your Fae. I've never seen them portrayed as fallen gods in any of the stories here on FP, so you get big plus points for originality. When you described a wolf-like creature, my first thought was 'werewolf' since that's the usual, so I was pleasantly surprised by the fact that it was a dark fae n.n A new character, yay! Let's go and see what happens next! Onwards, maties! Ar(yes I'm crazy, but I try not to notice that)
| CrimsonLilly chapter 1 . 9/9/2009
First, I read your profile. Then I read the story's reviews. Finally, I read the first chapter. And now you must think I'm weird, going in such a roundabout way only to read it anyway in the end. See, I found this story in friend's favourites and thought to give it a try. Then I saw the summary in the first chapter and thought I might have missed something; thought that this might be a sequel to some other story. Hence why I read your profile. Then I thought 'Why so little reviews when this seems so interesting?' and read the reviews. Now, I don't know if you rewrote this chapter after that reviewer that said they couldn't get it from the descriptions that it was a fantasy you did rewrite it, you did a great job. If you didn't, then I'm amazed at your lovely descriptions and the character portrayal. I'm guessing that that person just didn't pay so much attention to all the descriptions, so don't give it too much thought. To me, just reading 'old well', 'village' and 'fae' in the same chapter pretty much did the trick. Allen is such a loveable character and I'm quite intrigued by Bert and Jesse. Or well, by Allan's impressions on them.
Onto the next chapter!
| pour bottes chapter 8 . 8/24/2009
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Love the flow~~
I thought the confession was too sudden. Saying "I like you too" didn't necessarily have to be understood as a romantic attraction, so the fact that Darcayah understood it as one was surprising. I thought when he "brushed a hand lightly across his cheek", it was his reaction to accepting Allen's romantic love. Or maybe Darcayah didn't first think in a romantic direction and I'm just confused. XD
| joojoo chapter 8 . 8/22/2009
I love this story. Great job.
| Raobi chapter 7 . 8/17/2009
I love this fic! I can't wait for an update! Very good imagery and attention to detail too.