|Reviews for Pain|
| Breaking Boundaries chapter 1 . 7/13/2009
This was pretty good. If you put a little more detail and description into it, it would've been better.
But good job! I liked it. :)
| Amaury chapter 1 . 7/13/2009
It was a little bare, and I think if you added further description or used metaphors a little more it may improve a bit.
But, nice job. :]
| Silent Learner chapter 1 . 7/13/2009
Very dark. Good starting idea but it didn't really move anywhere. Try to elaborate on the purpose a little more and it would be awesome.
Great starting point with the idea though.