Reviews for Lies |
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![]() ![]() ![]() -_- um well i dont know what to say. i cant read things with so much emphasis on blood in them... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, this is intriguing to say the least. I do hope you continue, although I feel very bad for Janie... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Um... This story is weird and different. (what an understatement!) but it also has like a interesting, pulls the reader in the read the next chapter kinda feeling. && I like it. Thus, I would like you to update as soon as possible to see where this goes and how it ends. Obviously that girl has problems and I have many questions about both the girl and the boy that she really likes. So Please Update ASAP! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think this is going to be a great story. People seem to be very interested in love, especially dangerous love. A lot of people who are going through this would be happy that someone could picture or relate to them. However what you just wrote had no beginning or end it was just the middle. Try to start out with what lead to her hurting herself. I know that you made it so that she hurt herself over the fact that he doesn't care,(I think)but that is not enough. You need to make why she did what she did more specific or give more detail. This part is unclear: “But that’s how you like it, isn’t it?” What use was there in denying? It was the truth. She hated it, really, really hated it. But it was true, whatsoever. And there was really no way of escaping. (Explain what they are both talking about.) |